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Before you begin an Edujobs online application, it’s important to prepare the information and documents you’ll need. This will make your application process quicker and easier and allow us to process your application in a timely manner.
The Edujobs portal can be used to:
- apply for advertised vacancies in schools and preschools
- register for teaching work via the employable teacher register (ETR)
- register for ancillary positions via the employable ancillary register (EAR).
Personal details
The name you enter on your application must be same as on your birth certificate, passport or change of name document. If you have middle names, you must include them all in your application.
We’ll use your email address for most communication with you, so make sure it's correct, current, reliable and accessible. It must be unique to you and not shared with anyone else seeking employment with us. It must also be your own personal email address (don't use a work or university email address).
If you’ve worked with us before, enter your Department for Education employee ID.
You must let us know if there are any changes to your personal information. This can be done by submitting another Edujobs online application and attaching the relevant updated documents.
Entering your personal information
You will be asked for the following information:
- preferred name – the name you prefer to be called (for example, first name: 'Elizabeth', preferred name: 'Beth')
- previous name – any other name you have been known by which has been changed by choice, deed poll or marriage
- identity number – your identity number if you have previously been employed by the department (if you have a 6 digit identity number put a ‘0’ before it, if you don't have one or can't remember it, leave this field blank)
- postal address – include the street type, such as 'street', 'avenue' or 'road' (make sure you enter the postcode in the correct field – postcodes can be checked using Australia Post's find a postcode tool )
- email – use your personal email address, as this address will be used as the first point of contact for all communications
- gender – select your gender from the drop-down list.
Proof of identity
Evidence of your identity must be attached to your application.
You must be an Australian resident (or visiting on an approved working visa) and attach to your application either:
- Australian birth certificate
- Australian passport
- Australian citizenship certificate
- current work visa and passport details page.
Providing evidence of name changes
If your current name is different to the name on your birth certificate, passport or citizenship certificate, you must attach a registered registry of births, deaths and marriages name change certificate such as:
- marriage certificate
- divorce certificate.
Confirmation of Aboriginality
If you identify as Australian Aboriginal or Torres Strait Islander, you can attach a confirmation of Aboriginality.
For Aboriginal applicants living in remote communities who cannot access a birth certificate, you can provide 2 letters of verification from community leaders. Community leaders include traditional elders and the school’s principal.
Employment history
On your application, you must be able to provide your employment history for at least the last 5 years (without unexplained breaks). This can include:
- paid employment
- periods of unemployment
- tertiary study
- community experience
- volunteer work
- home duties.
Entering your employment history
Start with the most current history first and include:
- dates – the exact date or the month and year you started and finished the work or activity
- your employer or activity – who you worked for or the activity you were involved in
- location – the address, state or country where you did the work or activity
- details of the work you did or the role your played.
If you have previously worked for the department, include the name of the work sites.
Qualifications
List all tertiary undergraduate and post graduate qualifications. This includes any TAFE and university qualifications you have completed or are actively working towards.
Qualifications are not mandatory for all positions, however they do provide additional information which may be considered.
Qualifications are mandatory for:
- early childhood employment
- psychologists
- social workers
- as specified in the role description of an advertised position.
The Teachers Registration Board of SA provides information on approved education qualifications .
Qualification documents you must attach
On your application, you need to attach:
- final academic transcripts for university qualifications (if you are graduating later in the year, you can attach a copy of your interim transcript and replace it with your final transcript when your degree is completed)
- certificates for other qualifications.
Teaching graduates will also need to attach their 2 most recent professional experience reports.
For teachers with experience in government schools or preschools, we recommend attaching work reports (PDF 240KB) from your last 2 contracts.
All reports attached must be signed and a full copy.
Early childhood teacher certification
Early childhood teachers must meet 1 of the following requirements:
- hold a 4-year early childhood teaching qualification
- hold a university undergraduate degree and approved post graduate pre-service university qualification in early childhood teaching, for example Master of Teaching and a Graduate Diploma in early childhood that together satisfy teacher registration
- be a permanent Department for Education teacher prior to 2012 and hold a letter of approval from the Assistant Director, People and Culture Operations to work in an early childhood program
- hold an authority to teach letter clearing you to be employed in an early childhood program.
TAFE qualifications are not accepted as a teaching qualification in the South Australian Department for Education.
Teachers who complete 'provide first aid in an education and care setting (HLTAID012)' training will increase their employment opportunities in early childhood programs.
Refer to teacher employment requirements and registration for more information.
Early childhood ancillary certification
All early childhood workers (ECW) and school support officers (SSO) who are 'primary contact staff' within early childhood programs must have an approved early childhood qualification. Or the employee must be actively working towards an approved qualification.
Primary contact staff are the staff employed to maintain the student staff ratios.
The minimum approved qualifications include a 'Certificate III in Children's Services' or 'Certificate III in Education Support'.
All primary contact ECWs and SSOs in department preschool occasional care or rural care programs must have a minimum qualification of a 'Diploma in Children's Services, Education and Care'.
Refer to ancillary or support staff employment requirements and registration for more information.
Department employees and past applicants
Permanent department employees and past applicants do not need to provide qualification information unless they:
- are adding additional qualifications not already recorded through the professional profile system, the employee information kiosk (EIK) or past applications
- would like the qualifications to be considered by the panel in the selection process.
Certificates and registration
You won’t receive an authority to teach letter until the following have been attached to your application:
- Department of Human Services (DHS) working with children check (WWCC)
- South Australian teacher registration
- Responding to risks of harm, abuse and neglect – education and care (RRHAN-EC) mandatory notification training
- first aid training certificate .
See teacher employment requirements or ancillary or support staff employment requirements for more information.
Your referees must be able to speak about your work skills and abilities or your transferable skills.
If you are currently employed, your first referee must be your current line manager.
Graduate teachers should include their last professional experience mentor teacher and their university liaison.
You need at least:
- 2 referees for the employable teacher register (ETR)
- 2 referees for the employable ancillary register (EAR)
- 2 referees for advertised teacher positions
- 3 referees for advertised leadership positions.
Employment type
On the employable teacher register (ETR), you can indicate your interest in:
- temporary relief teaching only (casual work)
- temporary relief teaching and contracts of 20 days or more.
Temporary relief teaching is managed by individual schools and preschools or through temporary relief teacher cluster schemes .
On the employable ancillary register (EAR), you can select the job types you would like to be considered for:
- school services officer (SSO)
- government services employee (GSE)
- early childhood worker (ECW)
- hourly paid instructor (HPI)
- Aboriginal community education officer (ACEO).
For information about each ancillary employment type, refer to ancillary major functions (PDF 573KB) .
Employment hours and availability
When registering for work with the department, you can nominate the:
- hours per week you’d like to work (for example from half a day a week to full-time)
- dates you won’t be available for employment.
Make sure you keep this information up-to-date and accurate, as refusing an offer of employment might restrict further offers for the school term. A second refusal could result in your application being withdrawn for the rest of the school year.
Teaching subjects, skills and self-rating
The information you provide in this section helps determine your suitability for both ongoing (permanent) and temporary positions.
Enter the teaching subjects and the highest year level you are qualified or willing to teach.
You must enter at least 1 subject for your application to be accepted. Some subjects will require you to also add an 'expertise description'. Employable teacher registration (ETR) applicants are also required to 'self-rate' their subject skill level.
Updates occur yearly in line with the Australian curriculum. Applicants seeking employment in schools are required to update their subjects in line with changes.
Refer to teacher subject codes and expertise descriptions (PDF 222KB) for more information.
Entering your teaching subjects and year levels
Entering junior primary (JP00) and primary (PR00) will cover all year levels. For birth to preschool (BP) enter the year level as 'OB'. For preschool (PS) enter the year level as 'OP'.
To apply to teach across primary and secondary year levels, you will need to enter the subject code twice. For example, to teach PE from reception to year 12, you need to enter 'PE07' and 'PE12' with the appropriate rating.
View teaching subject codes (PDF 222KB) .
Entering your skills
It is not mandatory to identify skills within your application.
If you choose to include one of the skills listed, make sure you meet the criteria. The criteria listed will help you to identify the highest year level you can record.
The only skill that requires you to enter an 'expertise description' is 'ST' (specialist sports coaching skill).
View teaching skill codes (PDF 133KB)
Entering 'expertise descriptions'
'Expertise descriptions' are only needed for the following curriculum subject and skill codes:
- AV (Australian indigenous language) – indicate the language that you can teach.
- CX (computer aided design) – indicate the specific program that you can teach.
- DC (design and technologies – communication products) – indicate your particular focus, for example photography, sound, web design.
- DE (design) – indicate your particular arts focus.
- FV (media studies) – indicate your particular focus, for example screen studies.
- LI (teacher librarian) – indicate the library system that you have experience in, for example amlib, dynix.
- MI (instrumental music) – list the musical instruments that you can teach.
- MU (music) – list your preferred musical styles, for example jazz, rock.
- PH (photography) – indicate if it is darkroom or digital photography.
- ST (specialist sports coaching skill) – list the sports for which you are accredited.
- TO (working with children and students who are deaf and hard of hearing) – indicate your particular focus of communication, for example oral or aural, augmentative, Auslan.
- VE (vocational education and training) – indicate the VET specialisation from the designated list.
- ZD (the arts) – indicate the specific components, for example visual, performing.
- ZL (other languages) – list the languages you can teach.
- ZV (other technologies) – list the projects or initiatives, for example pedal prix.
Entering additional skills (other expertise)
Use this section to list any other skills or expertise which are not already listed within the department’s teaching subjects, expertise and skill codes.
For example: additional skills (other expertise): musical instruments, description: piano.
'Self-rating' your subject skill level
Employable teacher registration (ETR) applicants are required to 'self-rate' their subject skill level.
The subjects you list in your application must be allocated 1 of the following ratings:
- A – you have relevant university qualification and have teaching experience in that subject area (within last 5 years)
- T – you have relevant university qualification or have over 2 years' experience in that subject area
- N – you have no qualification or experience but are willing to teach that subject.
Refer to teaching subject qualification and rating process (PDF 133KB) for detailed information about ratings and self-rating.
Location preferences
When registering for work with the department, you can nominate the locations you want (and don't want) to be considered for work in.
All schools and preschools are grouped into portfolios and local partnerships . You can check which schools and preschools are located in the portfolios and partnerships you’d like to be considered for work.
You can also select the education and care types you don’t want to be considered for.
Refer to teacher location preferences (PDF 157KB) for detailed information.
Teaching personal statement
Your personal statement gives you the opportunity to outline your strengths and practices as a teacher. Your statement can be up to 1 page in length and should be a Microsoft Word document.
Schools and preschools read personal statements to help them determine the most suitable candidate for a position.
The personal statement criteria are different depending on whether you are applying on the employable teacher register (ETR) or for an advertised teacher vacancy.
See ‘personal statement’ section of teacher attachments (PDF 174KB) for tips on writing and formatting your statement.
If the role you are applying for asks for a resume, supply your resume as a Microsoft Word document and include:
- professional development
- additional areas of expertise (for example piano teacher)
- community involvement (for example governing council member)
- any other relevant information.
If you are applying for a teaching role, you don't need to include a resume – just your 'teaching personal statement'. If you would like to also attach a resume, you can do this in the 'other attachments' section.
Pre-employment declaration
To be eligible for employment in South Australian government agencies, you must complete a pre-employment declaration.
Your answers must be honest and provide full details where indicated. You will be asked about:
- medical conditions and disability
- criminal history
- employment history
- voluntary separation and workers compensation.
The declaration must be re-submitted if your situation changes and you need to change an answer or attach new information.
Failing to disclose relevant information will delay the application process. If you don't answer all statements honestly, you could put your employment with the department at risk.
Signing the bottom of the declaration (by selecting ‘yes’ and entering your name) is binding and declares that everything you have entered is true and accurate.
Providing additional information
If you answer ‘yes’ to any of the questions in this section, an additional area will appear so you can provide full details (including dates).
You are advised to attach supporting evidence or documentation. If the information provided is insufficient or inconsistent you may be contacted by People and Culture to supply further details.
In relation to any medical conditions or disabilities, you could be asked to supply further information from your treating specialist or medical practitioner. Any cost related to sourcing this information must be covered by the applicant.
Permanent employees
As a department employee, you are bound by the SA Public Sector Code of Ethics . Under this code you are required to make sure your line manager is aware of any declaration where you answered 'yes'.
The pre-employment declaration only needs to be completed once unless your situation changes and you need to change an answer or attach new information.
Document requirements and tips
Any documents you attach to your application must be no larger than 2MB.
Make sure you attach the correct document as indicated in the instructions on each application screen. Your application might not be processed if you attach a document in the wrong place.
Scanning your documents
If you don’t have an electronic version of your document, you'll need to scan it and save a copy.
Tips for scanned documents:
- name your documents so you can easily identify them later, for example ‘Resume – your name ’
- save documents to a location on your computer where you will be able to find them again later
- check the quality of your scanned documents to make sure the text can easily be read.
Checking the file size
You can check the file size of your documents by viewing the document’s properties.
If using a Windows computer, check the file size by:
- opening File Explorer (Windows Explorer)
- browsing to your document
- right-clicking on the file name
- selecting ‘Properties’.
Reducing scanned file size
To reduce the file size of a scanned image:
- insert the image into a new Word document
- double click anywhere in the image
- in the menu bar at the top, click on ‘Compress Pictures’ then click ‘OK’
- save your document.
Attaching documents to your application
Refer to teacher attachments (PDF 174KB) for requirements and tips for the various attachments needed for Edujobs online applications.
How to edit an existing application
You can update an existing application at any time.
To edit your application:
- login to the Edujobs portal
- access the application under the ‘current applications’ tab at the top
- use the drop-down box that allows you to ‘edit and resubmit’
- go through your application and make all required changes
- continue selecting ‘next’ until you reach the end, then select ‘resubmit’.
You must select the ‘resubmit’ button at the end for your application to be updated successfully.
Support with your application
Contact Big Red Sky for support with system issues, such as:
- password issues
- email issues
- internet service provider
- internet browser (such as Microsoft Edge or Chrome)
- attachments
- rows or boxes.
Big Red Sky help desk Phone: 1300 733 056 Email: helpdesk [at] bigredsky.com
Contact the department’s People and Culture Services Team if you need help with your application, or if you have questions about employment requirements:
People and Culture Services
Phone : 8226 1356 Email : education.hr [at] sa.gov.au
Related information
Other pages in this section.
- Types of employment
- Requirements and registration
- Authority to teach or work letter
- Pay, salary and allowances
- Teacher standards
- Permanent teacher placement
- Temporary and relief teachers (TRT)
- Professional experience placements
- Amy Levai Aboriginal teaching scholarships
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- Education Masters Personal Statement Sample
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This is an example personal statement for a Masters degree application in Education. See our guide for advice on writing your own postgraduate personal statement .
Recent developments in the social and political landscapes have strongly highlighted the importance of education for children in schools. Studying an undergraduate degree in History allowed me to gain a deeper understanding of societal change over time. Completing modules in Public History also let me explore the importance of education.
Having completed my degree, I decided that my true passions lie in the educational field. After a few years working in a secondary school, I became increasingly interested in how the national curriculum is built. To help propel my career into curriculum design and management, I decided completing a Masters at your university would be the best option.
As I have already mentioned, I completed my undergraduate degree in History. Afterwards, I went on to earn a PGCE and have been teaching humanities at secondary level for two years. During, I took a particular interest in the curriculum assigned for each year. Our current societal climate has been questioning some of the contents of the English curriculum, particularly in the Humanities. In light of these criticisms, I was inspired to also think deeply about how chosen topics contribute to the education system and what kind of topics could be appropriately brought in to expand our horizons. A Masters degree is therefore the perfect opportunity for me to continue exploring these questions and learn more about the practical implications of curricular design.
In addition to my qualifications, I volunteered at a museum during the summer holidays where I helped run educational events for children. This was particularly useful for me as it allowed me to learn how to compact and communicate complex periods to a young audience. It also helped me learn how to make subjects easily accessible and enjoyable.
Completing two years of teaching has built up my leadership skills rapidly. As a teacher I have been able to learn more about the role of educational leadership. I have also enjoyed communicating with my own superiors to learn more about their responsibilities in higher positions.
I was particularly excited when I discovered your course. By having a global focus, this course will allow me to truly explore the issues and debates I’m interested in. I believe having an understanding of global events and education is going to become increasingly important in our increasingly globalised world. I therefore believe that this course will prepare me the best for my future career goals as a curriculum developer.
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- How to Write Your Personal Statement | Strategies & Examples
How to Write Your Personal Statement | Strategies & Examples
Published on February 12, 2019 by Shona McCombes . Revised on July 3, 2023.
A personal statement is a short essay of around 500–1,000 words, in which you tell a compelling story about who you are, what drives you, and why you’re applying.
To write a successful personal statement for a graduate school application , don’t just summarize your experience; instead, craft a focused narrative in your own voice. Aim to demonstrate three things:
- Your personality: what are your interests, values, and motivations?
- Your talents: what can you bring to the program?
- Your goals: what do you hope the program will do for you?
This article guides you through some winning strategies to build a strong, well-structured personal statement for a master’s or PhD application. You can download the full examples below.
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Getting started with your personal statement, the introduction: start with an attention-grabbing opening, the main body: craft your narrative, the conclusion: look ahead, revising, editing, and proofreading your personal statement, frequently asked questions, other interesting articles.
Before you start writing, the first step is to understand exactly what’s expected of you. If the application gives you a question or prompt for your personal statement, the most important thing is to respond to it directly.
For example, you might be asked to focus on the development of your personal identity; challenges you have faced in your life; or your career motivations. This will shape your focus and emphasis—but you still need to find your own unique approach to answering it.
There’s no universal template for a personal statement; it’s your chance to be creative and let your own voice shine through. But there are strategies you can use to build a compelling, well-structured story.
The first paragraph of your personal statement should set the tone and lead smoothly into the story you want to tell.
Strategy 1: Open with a concrete scene
An effective way to catch the reader’s attention is to set up a scene that illustrates something about your character and interests. If you’re stuck, try thinking about:
- A personal experience that changed your perspective
- A story from your family’s history
- A memorable teacher or learning experience
- An unusual or unexpected encounter
To write an effective scene, try to go beyond straightforward description; start with an intriguing sentence that pulls the reader in, and give concrete details to create a convincing atmosphere.
Strategy 2: Open with your motivations
To emphasize your enthusiasm and commitment, you can start by explaining your interest in the subject you want to study or the career path you want to follow.
Just stating that it interests you isn’t enough: first, you need to figure out why you’re interested in this field:
- Is it a longstanding passion or a recent discovery?
- Does it come naturally or have you had to work hard at it?
- How does it fit into the rest of your life?
- What do you think it contributes to society?
Tips for the introduction
- Don’t start on a cliche: avoid phrases like “Ever since I was a child…” or “For as long as I can remember…”
- Do save the introduction for last. If you’re struggling to come up with a strong opening, leave it aside, and note down any interesting ideas that occur to you as you write the rest of the personal statement.
Once you’ve set up the main themes of your personal statement, you’ll delve into more detail about your experiences and motivations.
To structure the body of your personal statement, there are various strategies you can use.
Strategy 1: Describe your development over time
One of the simplest strategies is to give a chronological overview of key experiences that have led you to apply for graduate school.
- What first sparked your interest in the field?
- Which classes, assignments, classmates, internships, or other activities helped you develop your knowledge and skills?
- Where do you want to go next? How does this program fit into your future plans?
Don’t try to include absolutely everything you’ve done—pick out highlights that are relevant to your application. Aim to craft a compelling narrative that shows how you’ve changed and actively developed yourself.
My interest in psychology was first sparked early in my high school career. Though somewhat scientifically inclined, I found that what interested me most was not the equations we learned about in physics and chemistry, but the motivations and perceptions of my fellow students, and the subtle social dynamics that I observed inside and outside the classroom. I wanted to learn how our identities, beliefs, and behaviours are shaped through our interactions with others, so I decided to major in Social Psychology. My undergraduate studies deepened my understanding of, and fascination with, the interplay between an individual mind and its social context.During my studies, I acquired a solid foundation of knowledge about concepts like social influence and group dynamics, but I also took classes on various topics not strictly related to my major. I was particularly interested in how other fields intersect with psychology—the classes I took on media studies, biology, and literature all enhanced my understanding of psychological concepts by providing different lenses through which to look at the issues involved.
Strategy 2: Own your challenges and obstacles
If your path to graduate school hasn’t been easy or straightforward, you can turn this into a strength, and structure your personal statement as a story of overcoming obstacles.
- Is your social, cultural or economic background underrepresented in the field? Show how your experiences will contribute a unique perspective.
- Do you have gaps in your resume or lower-than-ideal grades? Explain the challenges you faced and how you dealt with them.
Don’t focus too heavily on negatives, but use them to highlight your positive qualities. Resilience, resourcefulness and perseverance make you a promising graduate school candidate.
Growing up working class, urban decay becomes depressingly familiar. The sight of a row of abandoned houses does not surprise me, but it continues to bother me. Since high school, I have been determined to pursue a career in urban planning. While people of my background experience the consequences of urban planning decisions first-hand, we are underrepresented in the field itself. Ironically, given my motivation, my economic background has made my studies challenging. I was fortunate enough to be awarded a scholarship for my undergraduate studies, but after graduation I took jobs in unrelated fields to help support my parents. In the three years since, I have not lost my ambition. Now I am keen to resume my studies, and I believe I can bring an invaluable perspective to the table: that of the people most impacted by the decisions of urban planners.
Strategy 3: Demonstrate your knowledge of the field
Especially if you’re applying for a PhD or another research-focused program, it’s a good idea to show your familiarity with the subject and the department. Your personal statement can focus on the area you want to specialize in and reflect on why it matters to you.
- Reflect on the topics or themes that you’ve focused on in your studies. What draws you to them?
- Discuss any academic achievements, influential teachers, or other highlights of your education.
- Talk about the questions you’d like to explore in your research and why you think they’re important.
The personal statement isn’t a research proposal , so don’t go overboard on detail—but it’s a great opportunity to show your enthusiasm for the field and your capacity for original thinking.
In applying for this research program, my intention is to build on the multidisciplinary approach I have taken in my studies so far, combining knowledge from disparate fields of study to better understand psychological concepts and issues. The Media Psychology program stands out to me as the perfect environment for this kind of research, given its researchers’ openness to collaboration across diverse fields. I am impressed by the department’s innovative interdisciplinary projects that focus on the shifting landscape of media and technology, and I hope that my own work can follow a similarly trailblazing approach. More specifically, I want to develop my understanding of the intersection of psychology and media studies, and explore how media psychology theories and methods might be applied to neurodivergent minds. I am interested not only in media psychology but also in psychological disorders, and how the two interact. This is something I touched on during my undergraduate studies and that I’m excited to delve into further.
Strategy 4: Discuss your professional ambitions
Especially if you’re applying for a more professionally-oriented program (such as an MBA), it’s a good idea to focus on concrete goals and how the program will help you achieve them.
- If your career is just getting started, show how your character is suited to the field, and explain how graduate school will help you develop your talents.
- If you have already worked in the profession, show what you’ve achieved so far, and explain how the program will allow you to take the next step.
- If you are planning a career change, explain what has driven this decision and how your existing experience will help you succeed.
Don’t just state the position you want to achieve. You should demonstrate that you’ve put plenty of thought into your career plans and show why you’re well-suited to this profession.
One thing that fascinated me about the field during my undergraduate studies was the sheer number of different elements whose interactions constitute a person’s experience of an urban environment. Any number of factors could transform the scene I described at the beginning: What if there were no bus route? Better community outreach in the neighborhood? Worse law enforcement? More or fewer jobs available in the area? Some of these factors are out of the hands of an urban planner, but without taking them all into consideration, the planner has an incomplete picture of their task. Through further study I hope to develop my understanding of how these disparate elements combine and interact to create the urban environment. I am interested in the social, psychological and political effects our surroundings have on our lives. My studies will allow me to work on projects directly affecting the kinds of working-class urban communities I know well. I believe I can bring my own experiences, as well as my education, to bear upon the problem of improving infrastructure and quality of life in these communities.
Tips for the main body
- Don’t rehash your resume by trying to summarize everything you’ve done so far; the personal statement isn’t about listing your academic or professional experience, but about reflecting, evaluating, and relating it to broader themes.
- Do make your statements into stories: Instead of saying you’re hard-working and self-motivated, write about your internship where you took the initiative to start a new project. Instead of saying you’ve always loved reading, reflect on a novel or poem that changed your perspective.
Your conclusion should bring the focus back to the program and what you hope to get out of it, whether that’s developing practical skills, exploring intellectual questions, or both.
Emphasize the fit with your specific interests, showing why this program would be the best way to achieve your aims.
Strategy 1: What do you want to know?
If you’re applying for a more academic or research-focused program, end on a note of curiosity: what do you hope to learn, and why do you think this is the best place to learn it?
If there are specific classes or faculty members that you’re excited to learn from, this is the place to express your enthusiasm.
Strategy 2: What do you want to do?
If you’re applying for a program that focuses more on professional training, your conclusion can look to your career aspirations: what role do you want to play in society, and why is this program the best choice to help you get there?
Tips for the conclusion
- Don’t summarize what you’ve already said. You have limited space in a personal statement, so use it wisely!
- Do think bigger than yourself: try to express how your individual aspirations relate to your local community, your academic field, or society more broadly. It’s not just about what you’ll get out of graduate school, but about what you’ll be able to give back.
You’ll be expected to do a lot of writing in graduate school, so make a good first impression: leave yourself plenty of time to revise and polish the text.
Your style doesn’t have to be as formal as other kinds of academic writing, but it should be clear, direct and coherent. Make sure that each paragraph flows smoothly from the last, using topic sentences and transitions to create clear connections between each part.
Don’t be afraid to rewrite and restructure as much as necessary. Since you have a lot of freedom in the structure of a personal statement, you can experiment and move information around to see what works best.
Finally, it’s essential to carefully proofread your personal statement and fix any language errors. Before you submit your application, consider investing in professional personal statement editing . For $150, you have the peace of mind that your personal statement is grammatically correct, strong in term of your arguments, and free of awkward mistakes.
A statement of purpose is usually more formal, focusing on your academic or professional goals. It shouldn’t include anything that isn’t directly relevant to the application.
A personal statement can often be more creative. It might tell a story that isn’t directly related to the application, but that shows something about your personality, values, and motivations.
However, both types of document have the same overall goal: to demonstrate your potential as a graduate student and s how why you’re a great match for the program.
The typical length of a personal statement for graduate school applications is between 500 and 1,000 words.
Different programs have different requirements, so always check if there’s a minimum or maximum length and stick to the guidelines. If there is no recommended word count, aim for no more than 1-2 pages.
If you’re applying to multiple graduate school programs, you should tailor your personal statement to each application.
Some applications provide a prompt or question. In this case, you might have to write a new personal statement from scratch: the most important task is to respond to what you have been asked.
If there’s no prompt or guidelines, you can re-use the same idea for your personal statement – but change the details wherever relevant, making sure to emphasize why you’re applying to this specific program.
If the application also includes other essays, such as a statement of purpose , you might have to revise your personal statement to avoid repeating the same information.
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Teaching personal statement examples
Giving you the chance to show why you'd be a great teacher, your personal statement is an important part of your application and worth taking the time over
What is a teaching personal statement?
Your personal statement is used to explain why you want to become a teacher and your suitability for the role. While your application form briefly outlines your qualifications, skills and work experience, your teaching personal statement is where your personality shines through.
Take your time with it. Many candidates often spend a few weeks on this part of the application as you don't have to write it all at once. You should get someone to read over it and be prepared to receive constructive feedback and write a few drafts before you send it off.
It's important to:
- use examples based on your recent teaching experience
- tailor your personal statement according to the school/age group
- use good, clear, written English, using first person terms such as 'my' and 'I'
- be original and honest
- avoid clichés and general statements, such as 'I've always wanted to teach'
- demonstrate a passion for teaching.
While it's crucial to get it right, your teaching personal statement is only a small part of the application process. Find out how else you'll need to prepare to get a teaching job .
How to write a personal statement for teaching
Your personal statement should be between 500 and 1,000 words. It's crucial that you don't copy and that the statement you provide is your own work .
This is your opportunity to:
- write about any relevant skills and experience you have
- explain your understanding of why teaching is important
- detail why you want to become a teacher
- list any extra skills or experience you have, such as volunteering or first aid.
See personal statements for postgraduate applications for more guidance.
The nature of your personal statement will vary, depending on the type of teaching you'd like to pursue. Take a look at some of our example personal statements to get an idea of how they differ.
Personal statement for PGCE primary
As well as focusing on roles in which you've gained experience with primary-age children, a PGCE primary personal statement should demonstrate your well-rounded personality and any skills that could be useful for the range of extra-curricular activities primary schools provide (such as the ability to read music for recorder lessons, or drama experience to help with school plays).
Personal statement for PGCE secondary
Many good PGCE secondary personal statements acknowledge the challenges involved in teaching older pupils and provide examples of where the candidate has worked to overcome these problems. As secondary teaching roles are geared towards teaching a specific subject, training providers are looking for more evidence of your subject and degree knowledge.
Personal statement for School Direct
If you're applying for the salaried School Direct route, you should discuss the experience you've gained in the classroom prior to your application. One of your references will need to be from an employer, or someone who can comment on your work ethic and suitability for teaching. Don't worry if your degree is unrelated to the subject you'd like to teach - you may still be able to apply by completing a subject knowledge enhancement (SKE) course .
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- Discover how to structure a teaching CV .
- Find out what it's really like to be a primary or secondary school teacher .
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Academic Personal Statement Guide + Examples for 2024
You have a bright future ahead of you in academia and you’ve already found the program of your dreams.
The only problem?
You have to write an impressive academic personal statement that sets you apart from a sea of applicants.
We know that writing about yourself might not come naturally. And when the academic program you have your sights set on is on the line, it doesn’t make it any easier.
But there’s no need to worry!
We’ve prepared this guide to help you write your academic personal statement and secure your spot in your program of choice.
In this article, we’re going to cover:
- What Is An Academic Personal Statement?
- 7 Steps to Writing the Best Academic Personal Statement
- An Example of a Stellar Academic Personal Statement
Let’s dive in.
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What Is an Academic Personal Statement?
A personal statement is an essential part of the academic application process.
Much like a motivation letter , your academic personal statement serves to demonstrate why you’re the right candidate for the course and sell yourself as a capable student.
Your goal is to show the admissions committee that they’ll benefit from having you in their university as much as you’ll benefit from joining the program.
Academic Vs CV Personal Statement
The term ‘personal statement’ can mean different things depending on your field.
In the world of job hunting, a personal statement usually refers to a few sentences that go at the top of your CV . This paragraph is meant to convey your top skills, relevant experiences, and professional goals to a hiring manager from the get-go and increase your chances of getting an interview.
However, in the world of academia, a personal statement refers to a more in-depth description of you as a candidate.
In a nutshell, an academic personal statement shows the admissions committee your academic achievements so far, as well as what motivated you to apply and pursue this position.
Personal statements are also often required when applying for certain jobs, much like writing a cover letter . If you’re looking at a position as a faculty member in a university or other academic institution, for example, you might be asked to provide an academic personal statement.
7 Steps to Write an Academic Personal Statement
Preparation is the key to success and this is exactly where our guide comes in handy.
So just follow these steps and you’re sure to secure your spot:
#1. Read the Brief (Carefully!)
Academic personal statements aren’t necessarily a one-size-fits-all piece of writing.
Typically, every institution has its specific requirements on what candidates should include in their academic personal statement.
To make sure you’re on the right track with your academic personal statement, read the brief carefully. Consider taking notes and highlighting important points from your program’s brief as you go through it.
Pay attention to any specific question the university wants you to answer. If you don’t address everything the admissions board expects, your personal statement will look sloppy and you’ll be considered an inattentive candidate.
Be sure to re-read the brief after you’ve finished writing your academic personal statement, too. This way you can make sure you’ve answered everything adequately and you’ll have the opportunity to correct any slips.
#2. Research the Program
Make sure you do your homework on the academic program you’re applying to.
You can’t write a good academic personal statement without research, let alone a great one. Much like researching your employer , taking the time to learn more about your desired school and personalizing your application can make a huge difference.
For example, you can dive into how your values align with that of the school you’re applying to, and how your experience and interests relate to specific things about the program. The more you focus on how you’re the right fit for this specific position, in this specific program – the better.
Carefully read through the school and program’s official pages since everything you would need to know is probably on the school’s official website. You can also ask current and former students for help but remember that whatever they say should never replace official information when crafting your academic personal statement.
#3. Plan Your Statement
An academic personal statement is meant to explain your academic interests and shouldn’t contain irrelevant details about your personal life.
Focus on why you want to study the course you’ve chosen and provide any information about your achievements so far.
Ask yourself the following questions to get the ball rolling on what to write:
- Why do you want to study (or work) in this program? How will it benefit you?
- How do your skills match the position?
- What makes you stand out from other applicants?
- What are your exact career aspirations?
- How can you and your work benefit the institution you’re applying to?
- If you changed fields, how did you decide to apply in this direction?
- What insight can you bring thanks to your different experiences?
- How will this change of field help your future career?
Write down your answer to these questions in the first draft of your academic personal statement.
#4. Look at Example Statements
Don’t hesitate to read other people’s academic personal statements online. They’re a great source of inspiration and can help get rid of any remaining writer’s block.
If you’re struggling to understand how to meet the language and formatting requirements for your academic personal statement, seeing actual examples is the best way to learn.
But be careful – don’t copy any lines you read, no matter how impressive you think they are.
Most universities run every academic personal statement through intensive plagiarism checking, and even a paraphrased sentence could lead to your application being rejected for plagiarism.
So pay more attention to the overall structure of the academic personal statements you read, rather than copying the exact wording.
#5. Structure the Contents
There should be a cohesive argument that your entire essay follows. Each sentence and paragraph should complement and build on the one that comes before it.
The structure of your personal statement should include:
An intriguing introduction to you as a candidate
The introductory paragraph should grab the admission committee’s attention and keep them engaged.
Here you should be sure to avoid cliches like saying how you’ve “always dreamt” of graduating from this university or of studying this exact program. Instead, give an example of what really influenced you to pursue this dream.
Here’s an example:
- I’ve always loved reading and since I was a child, it’s been my dream to graduate from Oxford University and contribute to the world of literary analysis. That’s why I spent the past year volunteering at my local writers’ society and giving constructive feedback during workshops and book discussions.
- It wasn’t until I failed my first essay assignment in secondary school that I realized the depth that lies beneath each sentence in a given text. I began to delve into the rich layers of literary texts and the intricacies of literary analysis became my passion. Although initially challenging, the depth of understanding that this field offers about human emotions, cultural contexts, and narrative structures enthralled me. I found myself questioning the narrative structures and character motivations that I had previously taken for granted, and I was eager to understand how the subtle and often overlooked elements within a text could have a profound impact on its overall interpretation. This need to fundamentally understand a given author’s work has stayed with me since and led me to pursue literary analysis as a postgraduate student.
An engaging body
The main part of your academic personal statement should detail your interests, experience, and knowledge, and how they make you suitable for the position.
This is where you should expand on your motivation and use the following tips:
- Why this university? Provide strong reasons for your choice, related to your future career or the institution’s reputation.
- Mention your relevant studies and experience. This includes projects, dissertations, essays, or work experience.
- Give evidence of key skills you have, such as research, critical thinking, communication, and time management, and explain how you can contribute to the department with them.
- Say what makes you unique as a candidate and provide an example.
- Explain who have been the main influences who put you on this path and why they’ve influenced you.
- Mention other relevant experiences, such as memberships in clubs related to the subject, awards you might have won, or impressive papers you’ve written.
- Talk about your career aspirations and how the program ties into your goal of achieving them.
Depending on the guidelines of the specific university, you could also divide your academic personal statement’s body with subheadings, such as:
- Academic background
- Research interests
- Methodological approaches
- Research experience
- Personal experience
- Extracurricular activities
- Relevant skills
- Career aspirations
A logical conclusion
Your academic personal statement needs a conclusion that ends on an enthusiastic note.
Make sure the conclusion reiterates the main points from the body of your text.
Your relevant accomplishments and desire to attend this specific program should be clear to any reader.
#6. Pay Attention to the Language
When writing the first draft of your academic personal statement, pay attention to the language and tone you’re using.
An academic personal statement is also a formal text, so your writing should reflect that. Colloquialisms aren’t appropriate, as they would take away from the well-mannered impression you want to give the admissions committee.
However, you also want your personal statement to be straightforward and avoid any complex jargon from your field of study.
For example, your opening sentence shouldn’t be overly complicated. You should communicate everything as clearly as possible, and be inclusive to those outside of your field of study since they might be on the admissions board that’s reading your academic personal statement.
Make sure that the tone throughout your text is positive and conveys your enthusiasm for the program. Your academic personal statement should show the admissions committee that you really want to be there, and why that’s beneficial to everyone involved.
#7. Proofread Your Statement
This step probably isn’t surprising to you but it’s worth paying attention to.
Your academic personal statement is a very formal document and it should be spotless.
So, make sure it adheres to academic writing conventions . For example, contractions like “I’m” instead of “I am” are informal, and should be avoided.
Mistakes like these are very common when writing about yourself, particularly when you’re used to describing yourself in informal environments.
Carefully proofread your academic personal statement, then run it through a grammar checker like Grammarly or Quillbot, then proofread it again.
The tiniest grammar mistake or typo could make the admissions board reject your application.
Academic Personal Statement Example
Ever since my first encounter with the enchanting worlds spun by Flaubert, Balzac, and Proust, my intellectual pursuits have gravitated toward French literature. With an undergraduate degree focused on French Language and Literature, I have been fortunate to explore my passions both theoretically and empirically, embedding them within broader themes of cultural theory and comparative literature. It is with great excitement that I apply for the postgraduate research position in the French Literature program at Kent University, with the aim of contributing novel scholarly perspectives to this captivating field.
Academic Background and Research Interests
During my undergraduate studies, I delved deeply into the realms of 19th-century Realism and Naturalism. My senior thesis, which examined the dialectics of morality and social structures in Balzac's "La Comédie Humaine," was not merely an academic exercise; it served as a crucible where my theoretical understandings were rigorously tested. This research experience intensified my interest in the complex interplay between literature and societal norms, a theme I am eager to further explore in my postgraduate work.
Methodological Approaches
My academic approach is fundamentally interdisciplinary. I strongly believe that literature should not be studied in a vacuum; rather, it should be contextualized within historical, sociological, and psychological paradigms. During a semester abroad in Paris, I took courses in cultural anthropology and French history, an enriching experience that complemented my literature-focused studies. This holistic approach will enable me to contribute a multifaceted perspective to the research endeavors at Kent University.
Previous Research and Scholarly Engagements
My scholarly activities have also extended beyond the classroom. Last summer, I participated in an international conference on French Literature and Post-Colonial Theory, presenting a paper on the depictions of colonial landscapes in Dumas' adventure novels. The opportunity to engage with academics from various disciplines provided me with fresh insights and underscored the importance of collaborative research. Further, I've had the honor of having a review article published in the Sheffield Journal of Contemporary Literary Explorations, where I critiqued a groundbreaking new translation of Verne's works.
Extracurricular Contributions and Skills
In addition to my academic achievements, I have sought to enrich my department’s intellectual community. I served as the editor of our departmental journal and organized a series of seminars featuring guest speakers from the worlds of academia and publishing. My strong organizational skills, combined with proficiency in both written and spoken French and English, make me a versatile candidate capable of adding value to the French Literature program’s broader objectives.
To summarize, my deep-rooted passion for French literature, fortified by rigorous academic training and interdisciplinary methodologies, makes me an ideal candidate for the postgraduate research position in your esteemed program. The prospect of contributing to academic discourse at Kent University is an opportunity I find deeply compelling. I am especially excited about the potential for collaborative research and interdisciplinary inquiries, which aligns perfectly with my academic philosophy. I am fully committed to leveraging my skills, experiences, and enthusiasm to make a substantive scholarly contribution to the study of French Literature. Thank you for considering my application; I am keenly looking forward to the possibility of furthering my academic journey in this vibrant intellectual community.
FAQs on Academic Personal Statements
If you’re wondering anything else about academic personal statements, check out the answers to the most frequently asked questions related to them here:
#1. How do you start a personal statement for an academic job?
Applying for an academic job is different from applying for a position as a student. First, you need to establish your qualifications and enthusiasm for the role immediately.
Start by explaining your current status, for example, as a postdoctoral researcher or an experienced member of the faculty, and specify the position you are applying for. Then follow up with your research interests or personal philosophy towards teaching.
You can add a personal anecdote or compelling fact that summarizes your academic journey so far, or your passion for the field. After that, your academic personal statement can go deeper into the qualifications from your academic CV and how you’re a great fit for the position.
#2. How do I introduce myself in an academic personal statement?
The introduction of your academic personal statement is the key to grabbing the attention of the admissions committee.
Start by stating the field or subject that interests you, and why. You can share a specific personal anecdote or observation that led you to this academic pursuit and set the stage for the detailed explanation in your main body.
The goal of your introduction is to give the reader a sense of who you are, what drives you, and why you would be a valuable addition to their department.
#3. Is an academic personal statement like an essay?
Yes, an academic personal statement can be considered a type of essay.
Both essays and academic personal statements are structured forms of writing that are meant to deliver a coherent argument and are divided into an introduction, body, and conclusion. They provide supporting evidence to prove the point and maintain a logical flow to guide the reader to the final conclusion.
However, essays tend to be objective and explore a specific topic or question in depth. Academic personal statements use similar techniques but they present the candidate’s qualifications, experiences, and aspirations in a way that’s meant to persuade the admissions committee.
#4. How long is an academic personal statement?
Typically, an academic personal statement is between 500 and 1000 words long.
The exact length of the text varies depending on the university and program you’re applying to. You should always check the specific requirements for your desired program, and stick to the guidelines you find.
However, if the university you’re applying to doesn’t specify a word count, you should aim for one to two pages.
#5. What do I avoid in an academic personal statement?
Since your personal statement is a crucial part of your academic application, it’s important to avoid any common mistakes.
Make sure the content of your academic personal statement isn’t too generic. Its goal is to give insight into you as an individual, beyond what can be read in your CV .
You should also avoid cramming too many points in your text. Your academic personal statement should follow a logical flow, and focus on the relevance of what you’re sharing about yourself and how it relates to the academic program you’re pursuing.
Key Takeaways
And that concludes our guide to writing an academic personal statement!
We hope you feel more confident when crafting your application for that academic program or faculty position you have your sights set on.
Now let’s recap what we talked about so far:
- Academic personal statements are very different from CV personal statements. While CV personal statements are brief paragraphs at the top of the page, an academic personal statement is an in-depth text that details why you’re interested in a given position, and what makes you a good candidate.
- The guidelines on academic personal statements vary according to the institution you’re applying to. Read the brief very carefully, and pay attention to what it says about word count and questions your personal statement should answer. Any mistakes here could result in rejection.
- There are differences between applying for a postgraduate program and applying for a faculty position. But in both cases, you should research the exact place you want to apply to and adjust your application accordingly to match the institution’s values.
- Always proofread your academic personal statement before sending it, even if you’re sure there are no errors.
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How To Start A Personal Statement: Tips & Examples
- Published January 20, 2023
We’re regularly asked the question “ how to start a personal statement ”? It’s a challenging task for anybody but worry not as we’re here to help guide you through the process.
The introduction is the first thing the admissions committee will read. That’s why the first sentence of a personal statement should be a catchy, attention-grabbing hook or story that grabs the reader’s attention and sets up the main point of your essay.
A lacklustre introduction may lose your readers’ interest, preventing them from reading the rest of your personal statement!
But don’t worry, this article will guide you on writing a personal statement introduction, a few examples of opening sentences and how to captivate the admissions tutors. Without further ado, let’s get started.
Top Tip: Leave Your Introduction For Last
You know what they say, the hardest thing to do is start . So skip the introduction for now and focus on the main body of your personal statement. If you’re not sure what your main content should be, read out how to write a personal statement guide.
After nailing down the main points, you’ll have a concrete idea of how your introduction can captivate the reader and stay relevant to the bulk of the writing. Go ahead and work on the rest of your personal statement.
Come back when you’re finished! And if you’re worried about your conclusion then check out our advice on personal statement conclusions .
2. Cut To The Chase
You only have 4,000 characters to sell yourself as an ideal student candidate. Make each character and paragraph count! That means forget about flowery words and directionless statements. When you start your personal statement, explain your motivations for choosing your course in one or two sentences.
Although you will discuss this in-depth in the main body of content, capturing your reader’s attention with a quick overview of why you’re enthusiastic about your chosen course is crucial. That’s why capturing the reader’s attention by jumping straight to the point is key to starting a personal statement.
3. Be Specific
Never give vague details when expressing why you want to pursue your course. “I always wanted to be an engineer since I was a kid,” or “I want to become a doctor because I enjoy science” isn’t advised.
On that note, if you’re applying to medicine refer to our guide on how to write a medical personal statement . We suggest being more specific than that, and you can include your academic achievements too. Here are a few suggestions that may help you:
- You witnessed an inspirational figure in your life solve a massive problem with a specific skill set (doctor, engineer, etc.)
- While you were at a charity event, you encountered a problem that kept people in deprivation. By pursuing this course, you’re a part of the solution.
- You’re good at, and you enjoy a specific skill set. The course you’re eyeing puts great emphasis on this particular skill.
- There was a moment in your life when you succeeded in solving a problem. You felt significant by doing so, and you want to keep doing that for the rest of your life (teaching poor children how to read)
- You watched a movie or read a book that ignited your passion for the course. After doing volunteer work or part-time employment related to your course, you’re determined to pursue it.
Craft a sentence or two that encapsulates the core of your “why.” Do this, and your reader will want to read more!
4. Demonstrate Knowledge In Your Chosen Course
An essential element of starting a personal statement is to express why you’re enthusiastic about taking your chosen course. You need to demonstrate that you’re aware of what you’re getting yourself into in the process. Answer any of these prompt questions for inspiration:
- What do you find interesting about the course?
- How do you believe the course will help you achieve your goals?
- How will you use your chosen course to contribute to society?
- What hurdles do you expect to encounter, and how will you handle them?
Decide which of these questions fits best into the main content of your personal statement . Write your answer in a sentence or two, weave them into your application essay and think about the help you received from your tutors in the past.
5. Ditch The “Since I Was A Child” Line
We’re often asked what not to put in a personal statement and “Since I was a child” is a cliche statement that gets thrown around haphazardly. How many students have said this at least once in their personal statements?
Recalling your childhood passions is a weak “why” for pursuing your course. Why? Because the admissions committee is looking for a relevant and up-to-date reason.
When you were little, you had zero knowledge and little enthusiasm to become successful in your field. You had no idea what skillsets you needed or what other options were available to you.
But if you were to cite a recent event in your life that supports your determination to pursue your course, that screams “educated choice” right there. And that is what the admission committee is looking for after reading hundreds, if not thousands of introductions.
6. Brainstorm Several Versions Of Your Opening Lines
The desire to get it right the first time paralyses you from starting. So permit yourself to write freely. Write as many versions of your opening lines as possible.
Don’t worry about the grammar, spelling, or character count just yet. Type everything that goes off the top of your head. When you’re done, take a look at your list.
Cross out the ones you dislike, and encircle the ones you think have potential. Then start piecing the puzzle pieces together to check out if the intro lines fit with the rest of your personal statement.
If you’ve found three potential opening statements, try reading them aloud together with the rest of your personal statement. Do they flow seamlessly into one another? Make the necessary adjustments. Play around with it until you feel you’ve hit the spot.
7. Make Your Opening Statement Error Free
Your opening statement is your hook line. Spelling or grammatical errors at the start discourage your reader from reading further. If you have errors at the beginning, you’ll most likely have them in your main content!
So make sure your English is simple, flawless, and straightforward. Run your personal statement through a tool like Grammarly to weed out most of the errors.
The Hemingway app is also a helpful tool for checking for passive voice and other writing problems. Take advantage of writing assistant tools, especially if you’re a non-native English writer.
8. Read Examples Of Personal Statements
Read as many personal statement examples as you can. Any that captivated you, keep them in your notes. Figure out why these statements stood out to you compared to the others. What elements can you place in your personal statement?
When reading personal statements that put you off, find out why. What characteristics do they have that elicit a negative reaction from you? List them down, and make sure you avoid them.
After this exercise, you should have a few more ideas about your personal statement introduction.
9. Ask For Feedback
Never underestimate what feedback can give you. Ask your family, friends, and acquaintances about your opening statement. Does your personality shine through? Is it straight to the point? Does it flow smoothly with the main content of your personal statement?
Listen to what they have to say. Jot down important points. You’ll need their feedback to get a second opinion on whether it works for you or not.
10. Give Yourself Time
Your chosen career depends on your college education. And a first crucial step is to convince the admission committee you’re worth accepting into your university. You have to give your personal statement your best shot. Give yourself enough time to brainstorm and think everything over.
You can’t finish a complete, well-written personal statement in a week. Much less overnight!
So make sure you set aside enough time to put your best foot forward. After finishing a complete draft of your personal statement, put it down. Forget about it for a few days. Then come back and reread it.
With a fresh set of eyes, you’ll notice details you may not have seen before! Revise as much as you need.
Do I Need To Write An Introduction For A Personal Statement?
Yes, we recommend writing an introduction for your personal statement as it provides context to the rest of your writing. The introduction is an opportunity to make a good first impression and capture the university admissions officer’s attention.
What is a good opening sentence for a personal statement?
Here are some examples of a good opening sentence for a captivating introduction. Note how it ties into the university degree almost straight away with first-hand experience:
- “Growing up in a small town with limited resources sparked my curiosity and drive to pursue higher education and make a positive impact in my community.”
- “From a young age, I have been fascinated by the intricacies of the human mind and the power of psychology to improve people’s lives.”
- “As a first-generation college student, I am determined to break barriers and pave the way for future generations through a career in law.”
- “My passion for sustainable design was ignited by a volunteer trip to a developing country, where I witnessed the devastating effects of environmental degradation firsthand.”
- “A chance encounter with a blind person and their guide dog inspired me to pursue a career in veterinary medicine, with the goal of improving the lives of animals and their human companions.”
Please do NOT use these in your personal statements, use these to guide you on how you want to start your personal statement.
Can You Open Your Personal Statement With A Quote?
It is a risky move to open your personal statement with a quote and can come across as clichéd or insincere to the university admission officers. However, there are rare occasions when it can work, just make sure the quote relates to your degree and experience you’re writing about.
Get Ready To Write Your Personal Statement
How does one start a captivating personal statement? Take the time to think about what makes an effective introduction.
Read examples of personal statements from other students to glean ideas for how yours might stand out. Once you have read through some good ones, they should be more than just two or three!–look closely at what elements made them so successful.
Then try applying those same principles on how to start a personal statement! Don’t forget to bookmark this post for future reference.
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A guide to writing the best personal statement for your college application (with template and examples!)
Why is boasting about a best friend SO much easier than writing about yourself? Unfortunately, writing about yourself is exactly what a personal statement essay requires you to do–whether it’s for your college admissions application, or for a scholarship application to pay for college . Here’s our guide, to ensure you’re well-equipped to write a killer personal statement!
First off, what’s the purpose of a personal statement?
What topics can i write about, how do i decide what to focus on, in my college essay, okay, i’ve got my personal statement topic. but now i have to actually write it. 😱what do i do .
- Do you have personal statement examples?
Now it’s your turn.
Your personal statement should share something about who you are, something that can’t be found in your resume or transcript.
For colleges:
- It should paint a picture for colleges to understand who we are and what we bring to the table. This is why it’s often better to tell a story, or give examples, rather than just list accomplishments.
- It should complement the other parts of your application. Consider your college application as a whole. Your personal statement, application short answers, and supporting documentation should together tell a story about who you are. This also means not being super repetitive with your personal statement and your short essays. (For instance, if you have to answer 3 questions AND submit a personal statement, maybe they shouldn’t ALL focus on music.)
For scholarship applications:
- It should indicate why you’re deserving of the scholarship. This often means making sure your essay relates to the scholarship provider’s goals. (Get more help on writing a killer scholarship essay here , and then make sure you’re applying as efficiently as possible. )
- It should showcase your strengths. This doesn’t mean it can’t acknowledge any weaknesses, but it surely shouldn’t only focus on negative aspects!
It can be overwhelming to figure out where to start. First, figure out what your choices are. Some colleges may have very specific college essay prompts. That said, many students apply using the Common App, which this year offers these 7 topics to choose from :
- Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.
- The lessons we take from obstacles we encounter can be fundamental to later success. Recount a time when you faced a challenge, setback, or failure. How did it affect you, and what did you learn from the experience? ( Psst – If you choose this topic, you can sign up for Going Merry and apply for a scholarship bundle : one essay, multiple scholarships! )
- Reflect on a time when you questioned or challenged a belief or idea. What prompted your thinking? What was the outcome?
- Describe a problem you’ve solved or a problem you’d like to solve. It can be an intellectual challenge, a research query, an ethical dilemma – anything that is of personal importance, no matter the scale. Explain its significance to you and what steps you took or could be taken to identify a solution.
- Discuss an accomplishment, event, or realization that sparked a period of personal growth and a new understanding of yourself or others.
- Describe a topic, idea, or concept you find so engaging that it makes you lose all track of time. Why does it captivate you? What or who do you turn to when you want to learn more?
- Share an essay on any topic of your choice. It can be one you’ve already written, one that responds to a different prompt, or one of your own design.
You’ll notice that #7 is a catch-all that allows you to submit any personal statement about anything at all .
So maybe that doesn’t help you narrow it down.
Here’s a 3-step solution:
STEP 1. Brainstorm about your life
Dedicate 5-10 minutes each to brainstorming about these 4 sets of questions.
You can do this by yourself (writing down your thoughts), or do this exercise out loud with a friend or family member, and then jot down notes as you’re talking. If you “think out loud” better than you do on paper, brainstorming with someone else may be the way to go!
(A) What were defining moments in your life?
How did these moments in your life changed you, what did you learn from it, and how has it shaped your future plans? Some topics might include:
- An accident or injury
- A best friend you made (or lost)
- A defining talk with a peer
- Something new you tried for the first time
- Revealing a sexual or gender identity, to friends or family
- Discovering something about your family ( e.g., see Jesus’s story )
- Moving to a new city
- Traveling somewhere, or learning about a new culture ( e.g., see Gabby’s story )
- Your first pet (new responsibilities as a fur mom or dad)
(B) What have you chosen to spend time on?
Remember to focus not just on the what , but also the why – What were your motivations? How did you feel? What have you learned? Some topics on this might include:
- The moment you joined band, color guard, or the soccer team.
- A time you struggled with that activity – e.g., Maybe you got passed over for captain of the soccer? Or maybe you got an injury and had to sit out on the sidelines?
- Maybe a moment you really fell in love with that activity – e.g. Maybe the first time you investigated a story for the school newspaper and realized journalism was your calling?
(C) Whom or what are you inspired by?
How did you find out about this person or thing? Why are you inspired? In what ways are you inspired? Is there anything that inspiration has made you do (e.g. join a club, do an activity or internship on the topic)? Some topics on this might include:
- Technology – Maybe a specific App made you inspired to learn to code?
- Person in your life – Maybe meeting someone (or knowing someone in your family) has affected you?
- A show, movie, book, or podcast that inspired you to look at life differently
- A dance or song that has made you interested in performing arts
(D) What are you proud of?
Make a list of all the things you’re proud of. These can be milestones, hobbies, qualities, or quirks that are what make you, you. Topics to consider might be:
- Times you saved the day – like that epic left-handed catch you made on the field
- Personal qualities – Maybe you’re really funny, or amazingly calm under pressure. What are some examples of times when you showed those qualities?
- Random life things you’re amazing at – Baking a mean chocolate brownie. Guessing how many gumballs are in a jar. Tell a story when that amazing talent was handy!
Don’t worry if some of your ideas repeat between sections. This is just a way to get ideas flowing!
STEP 2. Shortlist your ideas
Identify your strongest ideas out of the bunch. This should probably be very few (2-4).
STEP 3. Freewrite about your possible essay topics.
Once you’ve brainstormed some ideas and identified 2-4 winners, we agree with Find the Right College – just start freewriting! Start by writing a few sentences or paragraphs about any of your shortlisted topics, and let the words flow. Write for about 15 minutes, on each shortlisted topic. Don’t worry about structure or organization – this is just an exercise so you feel comfortable getting the thoughts out of your head and onto paper.
It will also allow you to see which of the topics seems to have the most “legs” — often, you’ll notice that your best topic will:
- Be the easiest to write about (those 15 minutes flew by!)
- Lead you to tell at least one interesting story
- Feel like it genuinely reveals something important about who you are
- Not be captured easily by other parts of your application (you’ll need a full 500 words to really be able to tackle this meaty topic)
Well, let’s start here: What makes a personal statement good or even great ?
Here are some things to keep in mind:
1. Get personal.
Remember the “personal” in personal statement. We all have a story to tell, and we all have a different journey that led us to where we are today. We might think “someone already wrote about this” or we might think our story isn’t unique, but IT IS.
2. Speak like you.
Write your personal statement in a genuine tone that reflects who you are . There’s no right or wrong tone – just make sure your tone represents YOU. This means, in particular, not using big words just to show off. Often, this just seems like you’re trying to hard. (Or, even worse, you accidentally use the word incorrectly!)
3. Think about your audience.
Who will you be writing your personal statement for? What message do you want to convey? If it’s for to the college admissions committee, how do you show you’ll align well with the culture of the school? If it’s for a scholarship provider, how do you show you support their mission?
4. Hit the big three: Story, Implication, Connection to college/major.
Most successful college essays do at least 3 things:
- Mention at least one anecdote or story. (“Show, don’t tell.”)
- Explain why that anecdote or story is important to who you are.
- End (or begin) by connecting this information, to why you are applying to this specific college. This may include information about the major (why you think their department/program is great), or more general information about what attracts you to the school (e.g., location, sports, extracurricular activities, Greek life). Get specific so the school knows you’re really interested in them! This is the one piece of your personal statement that probably shouldn’t be cut & paste.
Here’s an example of how to use that personal essay template:
- Story: When I was 11, my family traveled to Italy and visited museums — one specific painting made me fall in love with art. ( 1-2 paragraphs )
- Why important: After that trip, I did lots of art and studied lots of art. Mention specific extracurriculars. ( 3 paragraphs )
- Why this college: I want to apply to X college because of its excellent art program, which I can also complement by joining Y and Z clubs. Since it’s in New York, it’ll also offer my the opportunity to visit the countless art museums like MOMA. ( 1 paragraph )
5. Hit the length.
Make sure you keep within the required length. Normally if you aim for 500 words, you’re golden. Some college or scholarship applications will allow you to write up to 600 or 650 words.
6. Edit your work.
Once you’ve written your personal statement, step away from it. There was a time when we used to rely on pencil and paper to write down all of our ideas and information (including first-draft college essays). Now, we mainly rely on screens, so our eyes grow tired, causing us to miss typos and grammar mistakes.
So save that document in an easy-to-find folder on your computer. Then stepping away from your computer and taking a break helps relax your mind and body and then refocus when you come back to edit the document.
( Psst – If you’re applying for scholarships with Going Merry, we’ve got built-in spellcheck, and we allow you to save essays in your documents folder, so no work will get lost! )
We can’t stress this one enough: Don’t submit your personal statement without checking your spelling, grammar, punctuation, sentence structure, etc.! All the grammar things! Your personal statement reflects who you are, from the topic you choose to the style you write it in, so impress colleges (or scholarship providers) with excellent structure and great grammar!
7. Then, ask someone else to edit it too.
We recommend asking a friend, counselor, or parent to read your personal statement before you submit the document. One more set of eyes will really help you get a second opinion on the tone, writing quality, and overall representation of who you are in your personal statement.
8. Be brave, and hit that “submit” button on your personal statement!
Finally, when everything is completed, click submit! Don’t hold back!
9. Remember, personal statements for your college app, can also be reused as scholarship essays.
Get double-use out of your personal statement. Going Merry is your home for all things scholarships–fill out a profile, get matched to eligible scholarships, and apply. You can even save essays so that you can easily upload the same one for multiple scholarship applications. (We were inspired by the Common App to make applying for scholarships easier.)
Register for an account here , get the full lowdown on how it works , or just sign up for the newsletter below (to get 20 scholarship opportunities delivered to our inbox each each week!).
Do you have personal statement examples ?
Oh yes we do. First, here are some excerpts of personal statements from members of our very own Going Merry team!
Charlie Maynard, Going Merry CEO – wrote about what matters most to him and why, for his grad school application.
- The open paragraph read: “Being open to new ideas and able to take advantage of opportunities is what is most important to me. The most extraordinary times in my life have come as a result of moments when I’ve seized opportunities. This has been evident in my educational life, my travels around the world and my professional career.”
- This anchored the main topic of his essay. He then went on to explain examples.
Charlotte Lau, Going Merry Head of Growth – wrote for her college Common App personal statement:
“As a child, I was never close with my father, though we were always on good terms. He made me laugh and taught me all the things that made me into a young tomboy: what an RBI is, how to correctly hook a fish when I feel it biting, what to bring on a camping trip. But whenever I was upset, he wouldn’t know how to comfort me. He is a man of jokes and words, not of comforting motions.
But as I grew older and I too became infatuated with words—albeit in written form—our topics of conversation became more diverse and often more profound. We continued to watch sports games together, but during commercials, we’d have epistemological and ethical discussions more fitting for a philosophy class than a chat during a Knicks’ time-out. During these talks, my father would insert stories about his youth. They’d always be transitory or anecdotal, told as if they were beside the point. Still, I’d eagerly commit them to memory, and, over time, I began to get a sense of who my father was—and, in turn, who I am.”
Now, here are some excerpts from other sample personal statements:
These 3 are college essays about personal characteristics:
Essay 1: Humorous essay about getting a D and learning a lesson
“Getting a D probably isn’t the worst thing in the world, but it’s not something anyone wants to see, let alone put, on a college application. It came back to me, scrawled in red, on the first big history test of the year. The one the teacher had assured us was a third of our grade. I could already see my chances of a four-year college going up in smoke and my school year hadn’t even started yet.
What happened? I’m not a D student. I’ll get the occasional C as well as the occasional A. D’s are out of character for me, and enough of a stomach punch to really get my attention. The short version is, I didn’t study, and I don’t remember precisely why. There is always a reason not to study, isn’t there? I didn’t study and I went into a test woefully unprepared and got beaten up.
I had two options here. I could accept that I was in fact a D student despite what I had thought. Or I could study hard for the next test and try to bring my grade up by the force of the average.”
Essay 2: Why a talent (in this case, one at football) is also a responsibility
“Talent is not remarkable. It’s usually the first thing anyone compliments. “You’re so talented.” It doesn’t mean what they think it means. It doesn’t mean I worked hard. It means I was lucky, or blessed, or anything else you want to call it.
I have talent. I’ve known since I was old enough to hold a football. The game just makes intuitive sense to me. The pathways of the players, both my team and the others, where the ball has to go, and what I’m doing. In the silence before a snap, I’m already playing out what is going to happen, watching the holes in my lines, tracing the route of my receivers. […]
It is far too easy to view talent as an excuse. For me, it is a motivator. For my talent, I will accept nothing less than a dream that only a tiny percentage of people ever get to experience. To get there, I’m willing to work hard and wring every last accomplishment from myself.
Talent is a responsibility. Because you had nothing to do with acquiring it, you are compelled to achieve every last bit you can with it. While I had grown used to thinking varsity would be it, that was not the case. Now, I can focus on the goal while I accomplish the steps.”
Essay 3: On living with depression
“Before I was diagnosed, I had been told it was a normal part of growing up. I was told that teens are moody. I would grow out of it. I couldn’t imagine anyone growing out of what I was feeling. I couldn’t imagine anyone surviving.
Diagnosis and medication have saved my life, allowing me to see the world as people without my brain chemistry would. […] what I found was a place of tiny kindnesses.
It might sound bad—as though kindness can only exist in the smallest forms. This is not what I mean. There are extraordinary people out there who devote their lives to doing very large, very important things for others. I’m not talking about them, partially because they are extraordinary. They are not the norm.
What is normal are the tiny kindnesses. These do not cost a person much of anything. A slice of time, a moment of openness, and little else. They are a smile when you’re feeling down, a comforting hand on the shoulder, a moment to talk.”
And here are 3 college personal statements, about what drove their interest in their intended major:
Essay 4: On why this applicant wants to study music
“My great-great-uncle Giacomo Ferrari was born in 1912 in Neverland, NY, the youngest of four sons. His parents had emigrated from Italy with his two eldest brothers in the early 1900s in search of a better life in America. Their struggles as immigrants are in themselves inspiring, but the challenges they faced are undoubtedly similar to those that many other immigrant families had to overcome; because of this, the actions that my relatives embarked upon are that much more extraordinary. Giacomo’s oldest brother Antonio, my great-grandfather, decided to take a correspondence course in violin, and to teach his youngest brother Giacomo how to play as well. Giacomo Ferrari eventually became an accomplished violinist and started a free “Lunchtime Strings” program for all the elementary schools in the Neverland area, giving free violin lessons and monthly concerts.
As a native English speaker who has had the privilege of studying viola and violin with trained, private teachers, I can only imagine the perseverance it took for my great-grandfather and great-great uncle to learn an instrument like the violin out of booklets and lessons that were not even written in their native language. Their passion and dedication to learning something new, something not part of their lives as blue-collar, immigrant workers, and their desire to share it with others, has inspired me as a musician and a person. It is this spirit that has motivated me to pursue an MA at Composition at the University of XXX.”
Essay 5: On why this applicant wants to be an allergy specialist
“Suddenly I started scratching my neck, feeling the hives that had started to form. I rushed to the restroom to throw up because my throat was itchy and I felt a weight on my chest. I was experiencing anaphylactic shock, which prevented me from taking anything but shallow breaths. I was fighting the one thing that is meant to protect me and keep me alive – my own body.
[…] After that incident, I began to fear. I became scared of death, eating, and even my own body. As I grew older, I became paranoid about checking food labels and I avoided eating if I didn’t know what was in the food. I knew what could happen if I ate one wrong thing, and I wasn’t willing to risk it for a snack. Ultimately, that fear turned into resentment; I resented my body for making me an outsider.
In the years that followed, this experience and my regular visits to my allergy specialist inspired me to become an allergy specialist. Even though I was probably only ten at the time, I wanted to find a way to help kids like me. I wanted to find a solution so that nobody would have to feel the way I did; nobody deserved to feel that pain, fear, and resentment. As I learned more about the medical world, I became more fascinated with the body’s immune responses, specifically, how a body reacts to allergens.”
Essay 6 : On why this applicant wants to study medicine
“My passion for teaching others and sharing knowledge emanates from my curiosity and love for learning. My shadowing experiences in particular have stimulated my curiosity and desire to learn more about the world around me. How does platelet rich plasma stimulate tissue growth? How does diabetes affect the proximal convoluted tubule? My questions never stopped. I wanted to know everything and it felt very satisfying to apply my knowledge to clinical problems. distinct concepts together to form a coherent picture truly attracts me to medicine.
It is hard to separate science from medicine; in fact, medicine is science. However, medicine is also about people—their feelings, struggles and concerns. Humans are not pre-programmed robots that all face the same problems. Humans deserve sensitive and understanding physicians. Humans deserve doctors who are infinitely curious, constantly questioning new advents in medicine. They deserve someone who loves the challenge of problem solving and coming up with innovative individualized solutions. I want to be that physician. I want to be able to approach each case as a unique entity and incorporate my strengths into providing personalized care for my patients. Until that time, I may be found Friday mornings in the operating room, peering over shoulders, dreaming about the day I get to hold the drill.”
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Writing the Personal Statement
Helpful tips and advice for drafting a compelling personal statement when applying for graduate admission.
Make sure to check the appropriate program website to find out if your statement should include additional or specific information.
What does this statement need to accomplish?
The personal statement should give concrete evidence of your promise as a member of the academic community, giving the committee an image of you as a person.
This is also where you represent your potential to bring to your academic career a critical perspective rooted in a non-traditional educational background, or your understanding of the experiences of groups historically under-represented in higher education and your commitment to increase participation by a diverse population in higher education.
What kinds of content belongs here?
Anything that can give reviewers a sense of you as a person belongs here; you can repeat information about your experiences in your research statement, but any experiences that show your promise, initiative, and ability to persevere despite obstacles belongs here. This is also a good place to display your communication skills and discuss your ability to maximize effective collaboration with a diverse cross-section of the academic community. If you have faced any obstacles or barriers in your education, sharing those experiences serves both for the selection process, and for your nomination for fellowships. If one part of your academic record is not ideal, due to challenges you faced in that particular area, this is where you can explain that, and direct reviewers’ attention to the evidence of your promise for higher education.
The basic message: your academic achievement despite challenges
It is especially helpful for admissions committees considering nominating you for fellowships for diversity if you discuss any or all of the following:
- Demonstrated significant academic achievement by overcoming barriers such as economic, social, or educational disadvantage;
- attendance at a minority serving institution;
- ability to articulate the barriers facing women and minorities in science and engineering fields;
- participation in higher education pipeline programs such as, UC Leads, or McNair Scholars;
- Academic service advancing equitable access to higher education for women and racial minorities in fields where they are underrepresented;
- Leadership experience among students from groups that have been historically underrepresented in higher education;
- research that addresses issues such as race, gender, diversity, and inclusion;
- research that addresses health disparities, educational access and achievement, political engagement, economic justice, social mobility, civil and human rights, and other questions of interest to historically underrepresented groups;
- artistic expression and cultural production that reflects culturally diverse communities or voices not well represented in the arts and humanities.
Postgraduate Personal Statement Example: Education
Examples of personal statements are useful resources when applying to a university or college course. After all, personal statement examples can teach you how to write and structure your application, and you can quickly learn how to write a personal statement by examining others.
But with so many university personal statement examples available, how do you know if you’re reading a good one?
Postgraduate personal statements should highlight relevant academic and practical experience, research skills and ambitions and their suitability for the course. This postgraduate personal statement example for Education clearly illustrates these three critical elements.
Studying master’s degree personal statement examples can be especially valuable. They’re sometimes referred to as personal mission statements or statements of purpose , so if you’re tasked with writing a personal mission statement, the following example will work for you.
I’ve broken down this personal statement example section by section, with a commentary on each element.
That way, you’ll see its strengths and weaknesses and get some inspiration for your own personal statement .
Once you’ve read the personal statement example and analysis, you’ll be able to download a pdf of the whole document, to use as inspiration for your own!
Personal Statement Example: Introduction
“I will always be grateful to the passionate and experienced teachers I have encountered. They acted as role models and inspired intellectual growth and mental development at critical stages of my life. One particular teacher recognised my potential and cultivated my talents by allowing me to participate in competitions and take up leadership roles, preparing me for academic success and boosting my confidence. It is my goal to enrol in the teaching profession because I am infused with a similar passion and committed to building learning environments in which students can challenge themselves and share their ideas without fear of failure.”
Commentary and Analysis
This successful, sophisticated introduction combines several relevant themes and ideas. The writer also makes this personal – there’s a strong connection with the inspirational teaching they encountered and their career path – whilst being concise enough that it doesn’t give too much unnecessary information.
The writer clearly states their ambition towards the end of the paragraph, although it would be more effective if they had gone on to make a clear link between this ambition and the value of the course they are applying for. It’s a little disconnected from the course they want to study, and admissions readers generally like to see that level of connection near the start of a personal statement.
If you’re struggling with your personal statement introduction, check out my article on how to write perfect opening paragraphs here .
Personal Statement Example: Academic Background
“My undergraduate study of Psychology and Language Sciences has equipped me with the skills necessary to achieve this ambition. Gaining knowledge of teaching from a psycholinguistic perspective, I observed that teachers face numerous challenges, from aiding students in learning and conveying complex information clearly, to managing challenging behaviour and motivating students to study. Effective teachers delivered interactive lessons that involved and celebrated student discovery and applied tailored teaching strategies differentiated by design and outcome.
By understanding an individual’s learning mechanisms and social, emotional and cognitive contexts, I believe that students can be engaged and encouraged. Researching the intertwining relationship between the learner’s attention state and conceptual learning, I became strongly influenced by the work of Vygotsky, who proposed that students have infinite potential, which is unlocked by effective teaching. Consequently, I believe that teachers play a crucial role in scaffolding students’ learning; “What a child can do today with assistance, she will be able to do by herself tomorrow.” ~ Vygotsky.
Studying psychology and understanding the development of language and cognition has allowed me to develop high-quality schemes of work, teaching resources and materials suitable for a range of age groups. Although language knowledge is learned implicitly, it is helpful for second language learning if the teacher can explain the underlying rules of the language. The linguistics element of the course provided me with the practical skills to systematically teach grammar, vocabulary and pronunciation of English. With an understanding of grammar and the mechanisms underpinning second language acquisition, I believe that I can better identify patterns of errors and respond to the needs of each language learner. I also gained awareness and understanding of mental health and developmental disorders from the perspective of clinical psychology, which will help me identify students who require extra support and counselling in my future role.”
Commentary and Analysis
The first of the above paragraphs goes a long way to endorse the candidate’s suitability. There’s an excellent use of subject-specific terminology, with relevant reference to the value of undergraduate study.
Each point is related to the subject of Education and reinforces the writer’s experience and knowledge in this area. There’s a strong sense here that the writer understands the demands of teaching and is in an excellent position to meet the challenge of a career in this field.
The writer offers critical reflection and opinion on the ethos of teaching and education before referencing a key theorist. They have done this effectively, reinforcing legitimacy and adding academic depth to their point. The rest of this section is effective because it outlines what the writer learned from their experiences. They then build this into an awareness of both skills needed to progress and their professional ambitions.
This excellent section would have added value if the writer had referenced specific courses. Additionally, clear links could have been made between prior experience and education (the past), courses or modules they intend to study (the present) and how this will prepare them for a successful career (the future).
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Personal Statement Example: Practical Experience 1
“Whilst completing the academic preparation needed for a teaching career, I actively sought opportunities to widen my exposure and acquire relevant transferable skills. Under the mentorship of a senior government official, I interned as an administrative officer in the Education Bureau. Working on external and internal communications, I translated papers, drafted minutes, prepared presentation materials for top officials, composed emails and wrote blogs. This expanded my capacity to write complex and concise material with a specific focus, mirroring the techniques inherent in effective lesson planning. Equally, examining the challenges facing the country’s education system, I developed insights into policies related to primary study and had a precious opportunity to meet with the Secretary and Permanent Secretary for Education, where we shared our vision for nurturing the stars of tomorrow.
As a summer intern, I joined Slater University’s research team at the Speech, Language and Reading Laboratory and Child and School Psychology Laboratory in 2019 and 2020 respectively. I participated in research projects to improve reading and learning in children with AD/HD, dyslexia and ASD. These projects integrated psychological theories and research findings into curriculum design. The team introduced parents to dialogic approaches, which actively engaged children in shared reading, boosting children’s language expression. I also designed and produced teaching materials explaining the concepts of mindfulness training to primary students. These experiences encouraged me to teach flexibly and inspired me to research and explore new teaching strategies. Indeed, I intend to integrate what I have learned in my laboratory research in a classroom setting, evaluating and developing my findings in a real-world context.”
The detail used by the writer in this passage immediately clarifies their experience and depth of connection to the subject. The high-profile placement they undertook relates directly to their aspirations, and the skills they have identified are valuable concerning the study of Education. There’s an overall sense that this candidate has a clear view of the impact and importance of educational policy and would bring the value of this informed understanding to their studies.
Their internship is relevant and impactful, adding to their suitability. Their return to the same team indicates they can build positive relationships and work to a high standard. The added skills are considered concisely and connect to the demands of the course, encouraging the reader to make a strong link between the writer’s experience and potential. The writer then outlines what they learned concerning those experiences and their relevance to the course.
There could have been a more explicit link with elements, modules or outcomes of the course they are applying for and a more informed discussion of educational policy development challenges, but this is a strong, compelling section.
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Personal Statement Example: Practical Experience 2
“My tutoring experiences have reinforced my desire to study for a PGDE. I volunteered to coach children with SEN and held tutorial sessions for disadvantaged students, and witnessing their intellectual and emotional progress was extremely rewarding. I also provided private tutorial lessons on subjects such as General Studies, English, Putonghua, Biology, History, and Economics to primary and secondary school students. Becoming increasingly familiar with relevant primary and secondary school syllabuses, I was able to create meaningful interactions during teaching sessions. I frequently started lessons with a plenary activity to consolidate previous learning before integrating a wide variety of teaching strategies, including learning through stories, games, virtual field trips, songs and textbooks.
In addition to providing one-to-one teaching, I taught ESL, local classes and foreign language-learning workshops in English and Putonghua, promoting multilingualism. Consequently, I discovered that teaching a large class differs from tutoring an individual. Finding it challenging to keep all my young learners interested, I combined my learning experiences and developed different classroom management strategies. For example, I incorporated teaching with game elements, inter-group competitions, whole-class debates and role-playing activities. As a result, I gained the classroom management skills needed to teach large classes and was presented with the Foreign Language Leadership Award at the end of the programme. I am confident that these achievements will support my graduate studies and subsequent teaching career.”
Commentary and Analysis:
The first paragraph of this section clarifies the writer’s practical experience working with students. It uses some relevant vocabulary but is rather descriptive and limited in details that relate directly to the course criteria.
The writer goes on to outline classroom management techniques and shows high awareness of the demands of classroom teaching. This skillset links clearly with the course requirements, and their acknowledgement of these skills concerning their professional ambitions is evident. The whole section shows a dedication to and high level of engagement with the subject discipline, which is an ideal range of content.
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Personal Statement Example: Conclusion
“Passionate about serving the community, I took on responsibilities as the chairperson of the Economics Society, a transition mentor and a careers officer. As a mentor responsible for leading and managing students, I provided academic, mental health and career guidance to freshers at SYU. Some of my most enjoyable achievements involved building supportive relationships with mentees from diverse backgrounds. Equally, working as a Careers Officer has strengthened my leadership and cooperation experience and developed the skills to accurately communicate my student’s progress with colleagues and parents.
I am confident that the acclaimed programme at Marshall will allow me to receive formal teaching training, undertake teaching placements in school settings and realize my passion. Shadowing a mentor teacher in a local school will allow me to observe lessons from a teacher’s perspective and develop a fuller understanding of professional teaching strategies. Ultimately, I am confident that by becoming a lifelong learner and teacher who constantly inspires colleagues, peers and students, I can contribute positively to the education of young people.”
The co-curricular activities mentioned show responsibility, maturing and relevance to the course applied for, which makes them a valuable inclusion. Monitoring of students, record keeping and reporting are all specialist skills in education and showing that they have experienced these in the real world strengthens this writer’s application. There’s mention of diversity, which should be encouraged, but it lacks some depth of detail.
This conclusion’s final part acknowledges the course’s structure and ethos. There’s also a strong sense of ambition wrapped up in the value that the writer would bring to the faculty. However, there’s little specific detail about career options, goals and connections with alums, which would be sensible to include.
Overall, this is a sound and engaging personal statement, with various valuable examples of the writer’s suitability. More academic references would be helpful, as would greater evidence of research and professional ambitions and a stronger focus on the specific demands of the course. Identifying specific professors or research projects to engage with would also link the application more firmly to the target course or faculty.
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Psychology and education personal statement example.
As I've grown up, I've watched my mum graduate from a PGCE student to a senior-level alternative curriculum teacher. With powerpoints, worksheets and notepads about the dining room table weekly, I've learned to realise how much effort she truly puts into her career and into the students she works with. Not only does she develop lesson plans for whole classes, but she must develop the work for each student with a different need. As a student, you don't realise how much effort teachers put in- seeing my mum work to make connections with students that are often forgotten, and hearing students rave about her as a favourite teacher has been incredibly inspiring.
In Psychology A-Level, I've learned to connect our everyday thoughts and actions with the intricate science behind it. Particularly during the social influence topic, I was interested in the idea of complacency to authority- particularly poignant in society at the moment. I read Influence: The Psychology Of Persuasion by Dr Robert Cialdini as well as The Lucifer Effect by Phillip Zimbardo and enjoyed the idea of obedience being a perversion of human perfectionism. I was also able to apply their different theories to current events through the Speaking of Psychology podcast episode on obedience in relation to the Covid-19 vaccine. I have also applied my psychology knowledge to my own experiences in education such as through the documentary Babies, considering their ideas of nature vs nurture in relation to disobedience in education. This has also allowed me to develop my ideas on free will and determinism and use this in my A-Level studies.
Taking Maths A-Level I have had the opportunity to grow my ability to critically think about complex problems. It has also helped me to develop statistical analysis skills, something key to the scientific study of Psychology. English Literature has similarly helped me develop my academic analytical skills and has allowed me to advance my essay writing skills, essential for my future studies.
I have also dedicated time to volunteering at a local non-profit organisation that helps adults with disabilities find employment in the hospitality sector. As well as assisting and supervising volunteers, I have worked alongside the director of the organisation which has taught me essential skills such as teamwork and independence in the workplace. It has motivated me to speak out more about the inequalities found in everyday life. I would also like to learn more about the ways Psychology can be applied to assist people with disabilities, such as in the education system. In the future I would like to work with children and young people in education.
As a student from a working class family attending a grammar school in a middle class area I have felt the differences between myself and students of a higher class, and have particularly felt disadvantaged socially in relation to my peers. I would like to work toward removing this split within places of education, as well as ensuring that all students have equal opportunities. I would also like to be able to take my experiences working in the charity sector, my own time in secondary education and my future studies to find a career where I can help young people in any way I can.
I currently undertake a student leader role in school, particularly working to put together charity fundraising events and collections in school as well as independently creating a transition booklet for future students. This has helped me to develop my leadership and organisational skills, which I find beneficial for work and external volunteering roles. I also compete in local competitions in Karate, and I take pride in my progress in learning to play a variety of brass instruments throughout primary and secondary school. Learning these skills has taken patience and shows my focus and perseverance when learning. I would also like to be able to continue these extracurriculars whilst in future studies.
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CFPB Bans Navient from Federal Student Loan Servicing and Orders the Company to Pay $120 Million for Wide-Ranging Student Lending Failures
Order would put an end to Navient’s years of abuse of students and taxpayers in the federal student loan program
WASHINGTON, D.C. – Today, the Consumer Financial Protection Bureau (CFPB) filed a proposed order against the student loan servicer Navient for its years of failures and lawbreaking. If entered by the court, the proposed order would permanently ban the company from servicing federal Direct Loans and would forbid the company from directly servicing or acquiring most loans under the Federal Family Education Loan Program . These bans would largely remove Navient from a market where it, among other illegal actions, steered numerous student loan borrowers into costly repayment options. Navient also illegally deprived student borrowers of opportunities to enroll in more affordable income-driven repayment plans and forced them to pay much more than they should have. Under the terms of the order, Navient would have to pay a $20 million penalty and provide $100 million in redress for harmed borrowers.
“For years, Navient’s top executives profited handsomely by exploiting students and taxpayers,” said CFPB Director Rohit Chopra. “By banning the notorious student loan giant from federal student loan servicing and ensuring the winddown of these operations, the CFPB will finally put an end to the years of abuse.”
“I applaud the CFPB for obtaining concrete relief for borrowers and deterring similar failures in the future,” said U.S. Under Secretary of Education James Kvaal. “Today’s action builds on the Biden-Harris Administration’s work to hold loan servicers accountable and protect borrowers, including more than 1 million borrowers who have received debt relief by fixing past failures to properly track progress toward forgiveness, such as correcting harms from forbearance steering.”
The CFPB’s investigation of Navient kicked off a series of efforts by state and federal agencies to examine forbearance steering and other breakdowns in the income-driven repayment program. Those efforts have resulted in more than $50 billion in debt relief for more than 1 million borrowers who were wrongly steered into forbearance, as well as those who had payments miscounted. Today’s order complements actions already taken by the Department of Education and state attorneys general to provide redress to borrowers harmed by Navient.
Navient (NASDAQ: NAVI) is headquartered in Herndon, Virginia, and was formerly known as Sallie Mae. At the time of the CFPB’s lawsuit in 2017, Navient was the largest student loan servicer in the United States. It serviced student loans of more than 12 million borrowers, including more than 6 million accounts under its contract with the Department of Education. Altogether, it serviced more than $300 billion in federal and private student loans. During the period covering the CFPB’s lawsuit, the company was led by CEO Jack Remondi. Remondi orchestrated the launch of Navient out of Sallie Mae. Since the launch of Navient, the company’s performance has lagged others in the industry. Last year, Navient’s board of directors replaced Remondi and began to transition the company away from its sordid history.
The CFPB sued Navient for failing borrowers at every stage of repayment. The lawsuit alleges that Navient steered borrowers who may have qualified for income-driven repayment plans into forbearance instead. This practice was cheaper and simpler for Navient, but detrimental to borrowers. By steering struggling borrowers into forbearance – where interest continues to accrue and capitalize – Navient’s illegal actions led numerous borrowers to pay additional interest charges.
Navient is a repeat offender with a long history of regulatory violations. After a referral from the CFPB, in 2014, the Department of Justice and the Federal Deposit Insurance Corporation ordered Navient and its predecessor, Sallie Mae, to pay almost $100 million for illegally overcharging nearly 78,000 servicemembers. In 2021, the Department of Education ordered Navient to return more than $22 million in overcharges. In 2022, 39 state attorneys general announced a $1.85 billion settlement with Navient for originating predatory student loans in addition to its forbearance steering practices.
In 2021, Navient’s contract with the Department of Education to service Direct Loans finally ended. Navient announced in early 2024 that it intended to transfer the servicing of its remaining loans to another servicer. The CFPB’s order would ensure that Navient can never harm federal student loan borrowers at scale by getting back into the business of directly servicing federal student loans or growing its Federal Family Education Loan Program loan portfolio.
Navient violated the Consumer Financial Protection Act, the Fair Credit Reporting Act, and the Fair Debt Collection Practices Act. In addition to its unlawful steering activities, the CFPB alleges Navient harmed student loan borrowers by:
- Misleading borrowers about income-driven repayment plans: Navient failed to adequately notify borrowers who enrolled in income-driven repayment plans about the requirement to annually recertify their enrollment. Borrowers were not properly notified that submitting an incorrect or incomplete application to recertify their enrollment could lead to an increase in their monthly payments and delay loan cancellation.
- Botching payment processing: Many borrowers had multiple student loans with varying interest rates and monthly payments. When borrowers made payments meant to cover multiple loans, Navient misallocated payments. Navient also misapplied payments made to a particular loan. These errors resulted in late fees, interest accrual, and negative credit reporting.
- Harming the credit of disabled borrowers, including severely injured veterans: Navient tarnished the credit reports of borrowers who had received a discharge on their federal student loans due to a total and permanent disability.
- Deceiving borrowers about Navient’s requirements for cosigner release: Navient made representations to private loan borrowers that if they paid down their loans in a certain way, they could apply for their cosigners to be released. But Navient did not honor those representations for some borrowers.
- Misleading borrowers about improving credit scores and the consequences of federal student loan rehabilitation: For federal student loan borrowers whose loans went into default, Navient’s debt collection arm promised credit reporting relief to borrowers if they completed a rehabilitation program. Navient failed to deliver on all of the promised relief.
Enforcement Action
Under the Consumer Financial Protection Act, the CFPB has the authority to take action against institutions violating consumer financial protection laws, including engaging in unfair, deceptive, or abusive acts or practices.
If entered by the court, the CFPB’s order bans Navient from most federal student loan activities. Navient would no longer be able to service federal Direct Loans and, with certain limited exceptions, no longer be able to acquire Federal Family Education Loan Program loans. Navient would also be banned from conducting consumer-facing servicing activities for the Federal Family Education Loan Program. Where Navient is the master servicer for any remaining Federal Family Education Loan Program loans, the order requires Navient to take a series of steps to help ensure borrowers’ rights are protected, including the right to enroll in more affordable repayment plans.
The order also requires Navient to:
- Pay $100 million redress to consumers: Navient will be required to provide $100 million in redress for affected consumers.
- Pay a $20 million penalty: Navient will pay $20 million into the CFPB’s victims relief fund .
Read the proposed order .
Borrower Relief
The CFPB will mail checks to consumers who are eligible to obtain redress under the settlement. Consumers do not need to do anything to obtain redress and should be aware of scammers that may try to use CFPB employees’ names and imagery to try to steal money or private information. The CFPB will never require consumers to pay money to obtain redress, nor will we ask for additional information before consumers can cash a redress check that we’ve issued. On the CFPB’s webpage, consumers can obtain general information about CFPB redress checks and more information about how to avoid potential scams .
Since 2013, the CFPB has supervised the student loan market for risks to consumers. In addition to the Navient enforcement action, the CFPB has engaged in a range of supervisory work on the failures in the income-driven repayment system, in partnership with the Department of Education, state enforcement agencies, and banking regulators. This work has identified the shoddy student loan servicing that has derailed borrowers from making progress toward loan cancellation under existing federal programs, including income-driven repayment. This work was instrumental to a 2022 announcement by the Department of Education to implement a fix to correct the failures of servicers and to help borrowers receive or move closer to loan cancellation.
Learn more about the information and resources the CFPB has available for consumers considering student loans and for consumers with student loans.
Read consumer complaints about Navient.
Read consumer complaints about student loan servicing.
Consumers can submit complaints about financial products and services, including student loans and student servicing, by visiting the CFPB’s website or by calling (855) 411-CFPB (2372) .
Employees who believe their company has violated federal consumer financial protection laws are encouraged to send information about what they know to [email protected] . To learn more about reporting potential industry misconduct, visit the CFPB’s website .
The Consumer Financial Protection Bureau is a 21st century agency that implements and enforces Federal consumer financial law and ensures that markets for consumer financial products are fair, transparent, and competitive. For more information, visit www.consumerfinance.gov .
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Personal Statement Example: Practical Experience 2. "My tutoring experiences have reinforced my desire to study for a PGDE. I volunteered to coach children with SEN and held tutorial sessions for disadvantaged students, and witnessing their intellectual and emotional progress was extremely rewarding.
This is my personal statement used to apply for Psychology and Education or Educational Psychology depending on the University. This got me offers from UCL, Manchester, Bristol, Leeds and Keele along with predicted grades A*AA. This personal statement is unrated. As I've grown up, I've watched my mum graduate from a PGCE student to a senior ...
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