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Maggie Francisco, OD, FAAO from SCCO’s Class of 2016
For all optometry school applicants who are in the process of writing their personal statements, this article will help. I highly endorse its wisdom.
After Maggie shares tips on how to write a memorable and winning essay, included at the end of this article is the very essay she submitted with her application. It is a perfect example of how to “show and not tell,” revealing through its narrative her unique personality, her professionalism, preparation, and passion for optometry.
Article and Personal Essay Written by Maggie Francisco, Optometry Student, SCCO, Class of 2016
According to Dr. Munroe, the goal of the personal statement is to show the admissions team mainly three things; 1) your personality, 2) your commitment to optometry, and 3) your passion and motivation that will help guide you through optometry school—the “fire in your belly.” Your GPA and OAT scores will speak for themselves, but the personal statement is your one opportunity to show them who you are and what sets you apart from the sea of applicants they are wading through each day. What makes you different? What makes you… you?
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These are often tough questions to answer, especially when many of us in the application phase are at the age when we are just starting to figure that out for ourselves. That is why people typically come up with the same or similar, slightly monotonous story—they got glasses when they were little, their grandmother had glaucoma, they liked their optometrist, they had a lazy eye, etc.—and they discovered, “Hey, optometry is pretty cool…” Which leads me to my first “don’t” for writing a memorable and winning personal statement:
1. DON’T Be Generic
Yes, these stories are important to how you discovered optometry and why it is so important to you. So don’t leave them out completely! But don’t focus too much on it because everyone has glasses or a grandma with glaucoma or a cool optometrist or a lazy eye or something that inspired them to pursue optometry. Use this opportunity to write about your UNIQUE experiences and don’t feel like you have to linger on your back-story. Just mention your story briefly and move on to the good stuff—what have you done to learn about or invest yourself in the optometric profession? What are your goals? Your dreams? That is what they care to read and what makes your story unique.
2. DON’T Tell Them; Show Them
Telling your story seems like it should be the main goal of a personal statement, but you don’t just want to tell them a story—you have to show them! Paint them a picture, something they can relate to and that tells them more about you than do the words alone.
Personal Statement Example One:
“When I was a child, my pediatrician inspired me to become a doctor because she was smart, nice and always made me feel better. I vowed to be just like her.” (1)
Personal Statement Example Two:
“I remember the first time I went into my pediatrician’s office: pure fear. Like most kids, the doctors was the last person I wanted to see. The interesting thing is that over the years I started to like Dr. Green because she was not only smart but able to relate with me and explain things in a way I could understand. She made scary experiences much more tolerable. I later went on rounds with Dr. Green at the hospital and felt my desire to be a doctor increase. I saw how hard she worked and what was required to be a good physician. The exciting thing is that I found these high standards didn’t scare me; rather, they motivated me to excel in school and become a physician just like her.” (2)
Example one simply tells the reader who inspired them and why, but in an extremely generic, unemotional and lackluster fashion. Example two, however, shows passion and humanity, all while showing her understanding of what a good doctor does and what type of doctor she would like to be.
This is the goal! Show, don’t tell.
3. DON’T Accentuate Your Flaws
One question applicants always ask is, “should I explain why I got those C’s?” or volunteer some information of that sort. The simple answer is just this: don’t do it.
The personal statement is a venue to show the admissions team what would make you a great asset to an optometry program,
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so why would you waste a precious word on something that you did wrong? If there is really a valid explanation for a slump in your GPA or a strange gap in your academic transcript—there was a death, illness or injury in your family or something of a similar, serious nature—there are other ways to express this. Some schools will have a “If there is anything else you would like the admissions office to know…” section on the application, or in the case of SCCO, you can email [email protected] an official letter (pdf/doc) to go into your file that can disclose details that did not fit within the rest of the application. Feel free to explain yourself in this manner, but definitely don’t feel like you have to. The admissions officers understand that sometimes life happens or a class was particularly hard, so just stick to talking about why you rock!
4. DO Be Genuine
The worst thing you could do in a personal statement is to lie or misrepresent yourself. Admissions officers read hundreds of letters each season—they can pick up on insincerity from a mile away. So maybe you didn’t do as much community service or extracurriculars as the next guy. That’s fine! Accentuate the things you did do—your shadowing, your passion. Don’t try to fool anyone with outlandish, highly exaggerated stories.
5. DO Keep It Positive
This goes very nicely with rules 3 and 4, but begs to be said.
Perhaps you went through some hard times in your life and you think it this is important to discuss to explain how you came to be who you are now; that’s understandable and commendable. But don’t dwell on it for an entire essay. As said in rule 3, you should be using all the space you have to talk about how great you are, not waste it on describing a sad moment in your life. You can mention your situation and how it changed you, but droning on and complaining about it makes it feel more like a manipulation tactic. Talk about how you grew as a person, how it made you stronger, how it changed your outlook on things, all for the better. And if it has nothing to do with your pursuit of education or optometry, maybe think twice about mentioning it at all. Most importantly, don’t hide behind a sob story in hopes of gaining the admissions team’s pity. Pity will not get you an acceptance—determination and achievement will always win out.
6. DO Professionally and Unapologetically… Be Yourself!
I think I’ve been working toward this main point throughout this article. You have worked hard, you’ve done your research—show them who you are and what you’ve got! Show your personality, while promoting yourself as a professional, competent potential-doctor.
- DO talk about the important things and what makes you, …you
- DON’T dwell on the negative
- DO be professional and passionate
- DON’T be afraid to be yourself!
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Maggie’s Essay
I felt something splash my arm―through my car’s open window, a bird had decided to drop “a little surprise.” It was a horrifying and unexpected interruption while driving home, still reeling over my day at the local VA Medical Center. The last patient of the day had a congenital retinal macrovessel that everyone in the office gathered to see. I felt lucky to have seen something so rare on my final day of shadowing in the Ocular Disease Residency program.
My introduction to optometry was typical―In third grade, I received glasses to correct my -3.00 vision and, as you can imagine, my whole world changed. Optometry became a potential career when I took a survey in my sophomore year that matched my interests with professions. Science courses were my strength, especially the active lab portions, so it seemed obvious that a survey would recommend a health sciences field. But, at that time, my passion was musical theatre. I loved to sing, dance, direct and perform on stage. Optometry offered flexibility―I could pursue community theatre after hours and have time for a family. So, my college aspirations were to do both; music and biochemistry.
The reality of the biochemistry workload made me realize that I could not do both well, so I had to put performing on hold. During the summer after my freshman year, I interned at Family Care Optometry, a small partnership in the suburbs. I learned about practice management; how to manage appointments, order and fit contacts and glasses, and manage patient issues. I sat in on exams and performed preliminary auto-refractions and visual-fields. I enjoyed the camaraderie with the doctors and experienced a warm satisfaction when a patient left with better sight or a healthier outlook. This experience, although limited mainly to refractions, confirmed that I wanted to practice optometry. However, for my next shadowing experience, I knew I wanted exposure to a broader variety of cases.
A few months later, I shadowed at an ophthalmology-optometry office managed by a large medical group. Dr. Smith didn’t have to worry about practice management or glasses/contact lens sales. He preferred this, stating that he felt free to be strictly a health care provider, not a salesman. Due to his relationship with the ophthalmologists, he had more treatment privileges and his patients had a larger range of issues, which made the day much more interesting and varied. I noticed the general respect his patients had for him and vice versa; he knew them, they knew him. They teased and complimented him. It was a fun environment, yet serious when necessary. He had to explain to a diabetes patient that her high glucose levels at Christmas time had caused bleeding in the eye. Placing himself in her situation, he explained the issue delicately, helping her understand the seriousness of the risks without scolding or degrading her. I admired his candidness and hope to model my patient-interactions after him.
I attended information sessions at several schools, so by the time I got to the VA Hospital, I was a shadowing-pro. I felt more prepared to ask questions, and was excited to be in a teaching environment with students in the residency program and on 4 th -year rotations. I asked about the instruments and how they worked. I wanted to get involved―to work the slit lamp and phoropter―constantly reminding myself, “Don’t touch” or “Don’t answer that patient’s question, it’s not your job yet.” Looking through the slit lamp’s microscope was fascinating; examining cataracts, implants, macular degeneration, and more. I discussed with the head doctors the benefits of doing a residency and the future of our scope of practice in California. I began referring to optometrists as a “we”, not a “they”. During my last day at the VA hospital, I dreaded my departure and longed to stay just a few more days. I couldn’t get enough.
No matter the type of practice I choose, my shadowing experiences have showed that what I love about optometry is working with patients. I always thought that I would enjoy the business side of private practice, but now I think I’d be happy just showing up every day to a lobby of patients, waiting for my undivided attention. I’m not ruling out private practice, but I want more days like the one at the VA. Since I couldn’t focus the equipment, I only saw pictures of that last patient’s macrovessel. I just hope the day I finally get to see one up close―the birds keep their excitement to themselves. (Published with Maggie’s permission. Names and places have been changed to protect identity).
(1) Fleenor, Jeremiah. The Medical School Interview: Secrets and a System for Success . Denver, CO: Shift 4 Pub., 2011, 15.
(2) Fleenor, Jeremiah. The Medical School Interview: Secrets and a System for Success . Denver, CO: Shift 4 Pub., 2011, 15.
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Use this Optometry personal statement example as an inspiration to write your own for the UK university application, if you are applying to study Optometry course.
Finding a profession that both fulfils one’s intellectual interests and provides a sense of purpose is the key to a rewarding career. It would be necessary for me to pursue a career with a solid scientific aspect to work, since I have always been fascinated by the fields of biology and chemistry, with the objective of helping people every day. As a result of my involvement in various work placements within the health sector, I have come to realize that optometry is a profession that allows me to combine both. I have been captivated by human anatomy because of my studies in sciences at school. Studying biology has allowed me to gain a great deal of insight into how the human body develops diseases and how it attempts to fight them – sometimes unsuccessfully. Studying Level Chemistry has reinforced my understanding of biochemistry, which has been of particular interest to me. In school, I have thoroughly enjoyed studying biology and chemistry, and I look forward to applying what I have learned in these subjects to gain a detailed understanding of ocular science.
An extended work placement at a local optician helped me gain a deeper understanding of optometry both as a field of study and a profession. I shadowed different opticians as they performed eye tests and contact lens fittings during the placement. The importance of good communication skills in optometry has become apparent to me. Customers and patients would have a much more difficult time navigating what can often be complex procedures without them. In cases where patients are suffering from vision problems or are distressed by the prospect of undergoing tests, opticians should also act with empathy and patience. In the laboratory, I also had the opportunity to observe – and sometimes participate in – the lens and frame preparation processes during my placement. As a result of this experience, I have a much better understanding of the different types of lenses that are used in glasses, as well as the technical skills involved in making them. Since I found the work placement so rewarding, I have continued to volunteer every Saturday at the same optician.
I have also carried out a work placement at a local pharmacy. This experience encouraged me to develop some of the personal skills that I believe are necessary for working as an optician. During the placement, I had the opportunity to interact with customers. Through this, I learnt how much I enjoy work in which I can offer advice to people, and also felt a gratifying sense of responsibility in response to the fact that the advice I gave them regarding non-prescription medication could play a role in alleviating the symptoms of their health problems.
In my spare time, I have participated in a range of activities that also allow me to be involved in helping people. In Year 12 I mentored a group of Year 7 students; I enjoyed being able to make them feel less apprehensive about starting life in secondary school. I have been involved with several fund-raising initiatives for Afrikids and Cancer Research, such as selling cakes and doing a sponsored walk. These activities gave me a sense of satisfaction by allowing me to work as part of a team with a common goal. My sense of teamwork has also been improved by my involvement in my school’s hockey and netball teams. On a more personal note, I am a highly enthusiastic musician; I play the guitar, and also particularly enjoy traditional Indian music. I have found learning to play an instrument to be both an outlet for self-expression and a way of developing my skills of perseverance. I am also an avid reader of fiction, in particular stories that ignite my sense of adventure, such as Lewis Carroll’s Alice in Wonderland.
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I am in your situation too. I used to be premed but chanced to preoptometry. However my grades are terrible and I don't want them to think I switched to preoptometry just because of that. Any answers to this post would be great because I am also doing my personal statement :/
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straightpath said: - I lived with my family during my undergrad, and certain difficulties at home intervened with my studies. Would it be valid to mention this? I don't want the admissions committee to pity me though... - I completed 3 prerequisite courses online at 2 different universities (not through my home university). Would this be a good place in my application to mention why I had done this? - I initially went into university without having Optometry in mind as a career goal. This was obvious in my volunteer activities as well. Would it be good to mention this, and explain that I only realized that I wanted to become an Optometrist after my first university year? But I did poorly that year... so would it sound like I only opted for a "less competitive" career option (although this isn't the case at all, and I believe that it's just as hard to get into as any other health-related field) ? I've improved my GPA since first year, but it still isn't that great. Any help would be greatly appreciated! Click to expand...
OpticalBlackOut said: C. Don't worry- this is extremely common for our profession. The important thing to focus on is how you became passionate about optometry. Show them your shadowing experiences; tell them your life-changing patient stories. Anecdotes that show your compassionate side really help. For me personally, I would prefer an applicant who is realistic about optometry (plenty of uncertainties in the future), as opposed to someone who conveys a 'rainbows & sunshine' approach. Best of luck Click to expand...
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undecisiveone1 said: I was actually debating this. Would it be looked down upon if I mentioned something along the lines of I realize the risks of optometry especially with regards to employment? Also is it wrong to assume I would have more family time as an optometrist vs. an ophthalmologist? Click to expand...
- Jun 26, 2015
I'm so glad I posted this thread! I definitely now know what NOT to include, and how to go about this. THANK YOU, you are all so amazing (taking your time to care for a stranger's future). Cheers!
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- Aug 13, 2015
OpticalBlackOut said: A. Everyone has their own struggles- whether it's working multiple jobs during undergrad, coping with the loss of loved ones, or professors who were out to get you. That's life. Rather than focus on the reasons you struggled, give the admissions committee your reasons on how you shined. At the end of the day, no one likes to hear excuses. B. Not the best person to answer this since I never took any online courses. (In an old man's voice "Kids these days...") C. Don't worry- this is extremely common for our profession. The important thing to focus on is how you became passionate about optometry. Show them your shadowing experiences; tell them your life-changing patient stories. Anecdotes that show your compassionate side really help. For me personally, I would prefer an applicant who is realistic about optometry (plenty of uncertainties in the future), as opposed to someone who conveys a 'rainbows & sunshine' approach. D. Apply early, get rock solid letters, and a great OAT score can offset a lower GPA. If there's time, retaking courses with poor grades is always a bonus. Best of luck Click to expand...
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- Aug 14, 2015
msrandomheart143 said: Everyone keeps advising to apply early... But relatively speaking what does this mean? Within the first month? within the first two months? Click to expand...
- Aug 16, 2015
Snakedoctor1 said: In my opinion, early means before October. Click to expand...
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Optometry Personal Statement
Whilst researching potential courses that would best suit me I discovered that optometry was of great interest. Shadowing an optician further increased my interest in optometry as I observed that an optician meets different people every day which makes every working day different for them. Studying A level Biology and Chemistry has taught me the scientific knowledge required to study optometry . Handling harmful chemicals and measuring precise amounts of those chemicals has improved my accuracy skills and attention to detail. Analysing data during biology and maths lessons has helped improve my interpretation and analytical skills. Studying A level maths has improved my problem solving skills, which will come into use for the problem based learning element of the degree course. Furthermore, my Health and Social Care course has taught me essential communication skills needed to …show more content…
Communication is a key skill for opticians as I have observed that opticians communicate with different people every day from their patients to their colleagues. Furthermore, opticians need to be organised and be able to manage their time effectively due to the number of appointments they will have on a day to day basis. I have spent a year volunteering at a primary school and an additional year working as a business administrator in the same school. This has showed me how to deal with children of different ages which I believe is vital for an optometrist as they too will be treating children daily. Working as a business administrator has improved my organisational skills and communication skills, as I communicate with different type of people every day. I have also gained ICT skills which will come into use in my career as an
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What draws me most to the OD program at MCPHS is the fact that the university prides itself in maintaining a culturally diverse student body. I believe cultural diversity is an important quality to have especially when it comes to handling patients. I grew up in a culturally diverse city, went to an extremely culturally diverse university (Wayne State University) and believe my own cultural interests would make a fine addition to MCPHS.
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Optometry Application Essay Examples
This is a sample personal statement question from the Optomcas centralized optometry admission application (optomcas.org).
Optometrist Simulation
A patient follows a nurse into a vacant room with a chair in the center. The patient takes a seat in the chair and starts to observe everything around her. There are machines connected to the chair and more machines surrounding it. On the wall parallel to her there are letters that increase in size row after row on a large white paper. The doctor comes into the room and examines the patient by using the machines and making her read the letters on the wall across. The doctor continues to exam the patient by using a flashlight to see how the eye will respond. All these tests will allow the doctor to see how poor the patient’s vision is. All of these details will happen
Optometrist Job Application Essay
What began as mere admiration for my childhood optometrist quickly evolved into a fervent aspiration when I began working as an optometric technician at Eye & Vision Care. Having been myopic since the age of 6, I have always had an interest in the inner workings of the eye and decided to apply to this job, without any concrete career plans in mind.
Optometry School Application Essay
By the time I enter Optometry School, I should be comfortable with the anatomy of the eyeball and its links with the human brain. In order to achieve this, I will have to succeed within biology for my undergraduate degree. Majoring in physiology will allow me to become familiar with the human body, and its functions.
An eager interest in the workings and anatomy of the eye has stemmed my interest towards a career in optometry. My fondness for science came from reading the book ‘The Man Who Mistook His Wife for His Hat', which recounts the case histories of patients lost in the bizarre, apparently inescapable world of neurological disorders, this drove my passion past the scope of the curriculum, engaging with ideas independently to follow a career in optometry.
Personal Narrative : Why Optometry?
Why Optometry? It’s the question that has been asked ever since I gained in interest for this profession and it is still being asked to this day. I want to become an optometrist simply because I love what this profession has to offer. My desire to pursue optometry stems from my passion to help others and putting others before myself, and becoming an optometrist would allow me to continue to do so while improving the quality of life. After working at an optometry office, volunteering at a clinic, and shadowing multiple doctors, I can’t see myself doing anything else than being an optometrist.
Optometrist Application Narrative
This helped me solidify my interest in helping people with their vision and eye care. I was able to pick up on how an optometrist goes about his day-to-day activities and talked with a few of them about the business side of their practice. Recently, before applying to schools, I was hired at a local optometry office close to Boise State. The job as a pre-tester has allowed me to be trained in using a tonometer, auto refractor, visual field machine, optomap, and the OCT machine. I have had a vast experience working in the private practice and really can see myself in an office similar to this one. The job has been all I have expected and ensured my career choice for serving people in vision health care and becoming an optometrist. Shadowing and working as a pre-tester have given me first hand exposure to the field of optometry. From the first time I looked through a slit lamp I knew I was on track to doing something I would be devoted to. Experiencing different types of practices allowed me to think about what type of practice I want to work in when I am older. I can envision myself working in a private practice with fellow optometrists. I would enjoy working at a practice that is multifaceted involving specialty practice in pediatric eye care and sports vision therapy, as well as providing routine exams and
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In my last year of high school, I chose classes that would help me in my career as a speech pathologist. My favorite class was Careers in Education. I learned that every kid learns in a different way and how to make activities that would help visual, auditory, reading/writing, and kinesthetic learners. Additionally, I took a Sociology class so that I could learn about society’s problems and learn how to solve them so that I could help my future patients and their families with any conflicts they
Optometry Application Essay
My decision to pursue a degree in optometry started from an unlikely source within the field of healthcare. I originally aspired to become a pharmacist and had extensive experience as a pharmacy technician throughout high school and the start of college. As I progressed I became more unsure of the profession, and did not feel as though as if I was making a difference. Patient interaction was minimal and I felt that having a more personable connection would make for a better healthcare professional. I always knew I wanted to become a healthcare professional, I just was not sure pharmacy was the path for me.
Optometrist Application Essay
I have put in an exorbitant amount of time doing research into this field; I have networked with professionals about optometry, analyzed each aspect of the career, and shadowed three optometrists. Despite coming from a small school, I believe I put in more effort than anyone in ensuring that this is what’s right for me and my future. I have prepared my whole high school career for what lies beyond it, by taking college courses through UWMC and NTC while in high school that have prepared me for what to expect in college.
Optometry Ambitions
Adversity, it is something that everyone is going to have obstacles in their life, no matter how big or how small. But I want to be an optometrist no matter how hard, but eventually also want to have my own small ranch with at least ten acres and a beautiful family. And I want to do everything possible to have that kind of lifestyle and be able to provide for my future family.
I am from the small city of Garland, Texas right outside of Dallas. I came from Viet Nam to the U.S for the last four years and I attended Richland College, where I am an active member of Phi Theta Kappa and Honor Society. My career goal is Doctor of Optometry. I have done 68 credit hours, and I will earn an associate degree in next spring 2016.
Optometry Goals
My goals from a career in optometry begin with my optometry education. My plan for attacking optometry has three phases: Phase One- General optometric education at Nova Southeastern. I want an outstanding education, supplemented by practical experience, such as that offered by The Eye Care Institute. Phase Two (a.k.a. “the chicken”)- Exposure; after a general education, I seek exposure within the field through such activities as a mission trip, service opportunities, and initial employment in a diverse setting, such as public or rural health. Within these settings, one can experience vast new cultures and the subsequent pathologies that accompany people in diverse settings, living under diverse conditions. Phase Three (“the egg”)- Specialization:
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My knowledge with various subjects in my school helped me well to excel well at academic front so far. Especially, my command and knowledge acquired in subjects like mathematics, economics and chemistry requires special mentioning here. Knowledge in mathematics helped me to improve my analytical skills and problem resolving skills to a great extent. Reasoning and investigation is also added additional skills for me through command over mathematics. Similarly, chemistry subject knowledge allowed me to understand well molecular level ideas and improved as well my manipulative skills too. My economics subject knowledge made more adaptive for the any kind of situation. Definitely, these three subjects knowledge instilled special qualities and skills in me until now. I find myself as apt to take optometry degree keeping in mind my acquired skills and knowledge. It has been my greatest desire and goal now to complete optometry degree in your prestigious college. I knew it well the opted degree program demands more commitment from me and my acquired skills are definitely going to be a greatest support for this purpose too. This career prospective degree program helps me build my career in a better way to excel well at optical work field. Mainly, correcting vision of the people something that I could able to offer in return to my country through completing this degree program. I regularly participate in many volunteering activities in order to find out others around us and to understand their opinions and ideas from their perspective. It offered me a chance to understand the world and it gave me chance to understand, what is that I could able to offer to this world in return. My acquired academic exposure and experience through volunteering made me decide towards acquiring degree in optometry and applied to your institute along with my application and all other credentials. I am seriously interested in pursuing this program with utmost devotion and determination. My devotion and determination will help me well to do well with the program and to build my future too. I am sincerely requesting you to consider my application through going through my candidature. The chance given will help me to prove about myself and to be a part of world as real help in improving the vision of the public. I will be waiting to hear your acceptance.
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The Personal Statement Optometry Edition
The personal statement for Optometry plays a significant role in the application process for many universities. They provide the admissions team with information on your academia, work experience, and personality, to help them determine whether you’re a good fit for their program.
Personal Statement Format - Optometry
A structured and well-written personal statement will highlight your strengths and demonstrate your transferable skillset. You should include your educational background, work history, volunteering, extracurriculars, hobbies, and aspirations (whether you want to stay in primary care, work in a hospital, or create your own business). If you’ve taken courses related to optometry, be sure to mention those too.
If you’re not too sure what to write about, ask yourself these questions:
What do I hope to accomplish by applying to optometry?
How have my experiences prepared me for university?
Why should they choose me?
This guide has you covered with keywords, bonus tips, and a successful personal statement optometry example.
If you’re applying through UCAS, then you’re limited to 4000 characters (including spaces) and up to 47 lines. Check your length by pasting your draft here , you may need to remove the spaces between paragraphs- this is normal and you will not be penalised for that.
Table of Contents
- Step 1 – Scope of Practice
- Step 2 – Keywords
- Step 3 – Mentor/Editing Service
- Killer Personal Statement Optometry Example
- Overview of the statement
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Step 1: Understand an Optometrist's Scope of Practice
An optometrist’s Scope of Practice simply means what their roles are, what they’re allowed to do, and day-to-day roles.
Roles – Research the difference between roles of dispensing opticians, optometrists, ophthalmologists, and
– this will show off your background research and understanding.
If you have shadowed an optometrist, mention their roles in educating, advocating, and treating patients. This isn’t somewhere to list roles but suggests how you hope to make a difference through these roles.
Standards of Practice – Look into the General Optical Council Standards – These are 19 standards each optical professional must abide by. Integrate some of these in your personal statement optometry.
e.g., Standard 5: Keep your knowledge and skills up to date – Show your ability to research outside of your currciculum, mention an article, or research that you read. Show that you’re aware that learning extends beyond university!
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Step 2: Keywords
- Collaboration- an ability to work closely with others
- Educator- willingness to teach others, educate patients on their vision health
- Advocate- care and support those with visual conditions, impairments & vulnerable patients
- Leader- handle the business side of optometry, manage a clinic, and mentor juniors
- Empathy- work with a diverse community, care for the young, elderly, those with disabilities etc…
- Communication- an ability to speak coherently, clearly, jargon-free, and alter your tone
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Step 3: mentor/editing service.
Find a Mentor
Most applicants resort to their career adviser for help with their optometry personal statement. Make sure your career adviser has a track record of successful students who have previously applied and helped with a personal statement optometry application.
Optometry is a unique field, focusing on the eyes and a part of healthcare. It’s competitive, meaning you want to use each paragraph to add value rather than repeating what’s already on your UCAS application.
The universities will have your academic records, predicted grades, and final results- so they know you’re hard working and can handle the workload. They want to know how you are as a person, your work experience, knowledge beyond the A Level curriculum, and evidence of your caring nature.
Professional Mentor – a personal statement editor or advisor is someone who helps applicants for a living. They should have had experience with optometry and the application process. My services include editing, rewriting, content addition or budget services which include proofreading, review, and grammar corrections .
Optometrist – if you’ve shadowed an optometrist you might be able to ask them to read through your personal statement for optometry. They can highlight any technical errors or fact-check to make sure the content is correct
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Personal Statement Optometry Example
“As an avid photographer, I grew passionate about learning the different camera lenses, apertures, and their impact on focus. This intertwined with my anatomical interests, which stemmed from biology, where I dissected an eye. Visualising the ciliary muscles and learning their function alongside the zonular fibres helped me to understand their function on the lens. A simple contraction causes tension enabling us to focus on near objects. This significant but small muscle carries out an essential function, if impaired, our vision would be hugely affected. Researching this inspired me to understand ocular anatomy and age-related conditions. My research and the dissection tutorial sparked my fascination for vision health. As a teenager, I was always drawn to healthcare, but I was now drawn to this fascinating sector of healthcare. Following my research on age-related conditions, I came across cataracts which are prevalent within the geriatric population. I oversaw the impact cataracts had on elderly patients while volunteering weekly at a residential home. Many residents lacked independence due to their visual impairments and mobility issues. I recognised that many required visual aids, glasses, or regular medication and appointments. To understand the impact this had on their quality of life, I spoke to many who were happy to share their stories. I empathised with their struggles and understood how vision is essential. I also learned how residents coped with their deteriorating vision by improving their room lighting, colour-coded medication, and asking for help. I was able to help with tasks like clipping nails, meal times, and cleaning. I found the team to be very helpful, and we worked closely to make sure everyone was cared for. This work was undoubtedly rewarding, but it made me wonder how those in developing countries or of a lower income are able to access or afford such care. This made me grateful for the cataract surgeries and extensive care the NHS provides for all ages. I hope to use this experience to understand my future patients and educate them on coping methods while they await surgery. I found myself using a more gentle and slower speech when communicating with elderly patients; some suffered from hearing issues and additionally required me to write things down or speak facing them while accentuating my words. I now bear this in mind and am more patient and empathetic toward others. To understand what optometry entails, I shadowed my optometrist for two weeks. I oversaw consultations, eye health checks, diabetic checks, and the use of OCT scans. Being eager to learn, I curiously asked the optometrist to explain the purpose behind each check. I’m grateful that she was kind enough to explain the procedures and the various conditions that can arise. We spoke about retinal detachment, symptoms, and the risk of sudden vision loss. I recognised how crucial it is to care for those in the chair, whether it be elderly patients or those with limited English. Each required a thorough check and an explanation that they could understand. In order to gain a comprehensive experience, I learned about the administrative side of optometry, what is involved in running a clinic, and ensuring referrals are followed up. I had a chance to respond to phone calls and book appointments. This improved my communication skills and ability to empathise with those who were distressed by their symptoms, I could relate as I had recently suffered from allergies, which caused a great deal of irritation and itchiness. Overall, I believe my shadowing, rooted interests in anatomy, and willingness to work in a patient-centred profession have drawn me to optometry. I, therefore, wish to learn, develop, and treat those who are in my care by providing a quality service that will continue beyond university.”
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A personal statement is a narrative essay that connects your background, experiences, and goals to the mission, requirements, and desired outcomes of the specific opportunity you are seeking. It is a critical component in the selection process, whether the essay is for a competitive internship, a graduate fellowship, or admittance to a graduate school program. It gives the selection committee the best opportunity to get to know you, how you think and make decisions, ways in which past experiences have been significant or formative, and how you envision your future. Personal statements can be varied in form; some are given a specific prompt, while others are less structured. However, in general a personal statement should answer the following questions:
- Who are you?
- What are your goals?
- How does this specific program/opportunity help you achieve your goals?
- What is in the future?
A personal statement is not:
- A variation of your college admissions essay
- An academic/research paper
- A narrative version of your resume
- A creative writing piece (it can be creative, though)
- An essay about somebody else
Keep in mind that your statement is only a portion of the application and should be written with this in mind. Your entire application package will include some, possibly all, of the materials listed below. You will want to consider what these pieces of the application communicate about you. Your personal statement should aim to tie everything together and fill in or address any gaps. There will likely be some overlap but be sure not to be too repetitive.
- Personal Statement(s)
- Transcripts
- Letters of recommendations
- Sample of written work
- Research proposal
For a quick overview of personal statements, you might begin by watching this "5 Minute Fellowships" video!
If you are writing your first personal statement or working to improve upon an existing personal statement, the video below is a helpful, in-depth resource.
A large portion of your work towards completing a personal statement begins well before your first draft or even an outline. It is incredibly important to be sure you understand all of the rules and regulations around the statement. Things to consider before you begin writing:
- How many prompts? And what are they? It is important to know the basics so you can get your ideas in order. Some programs will require a general statement of interest and a focused supplementary or secondary statement closely aligned with the institution's goals.
- Are there formatting guidelines? Single or double spaced, margins, fonts, text sizes, etc. Our general guideline is to keep it simple.
- How do I submit my statement(s)? If uploading a document we highly suggest using a PDF as it will minimize the chances of accidental changes to formatting. Some programs may event ask you to copy and paste into a text box.
- When do I have to submit my statement(s)? Most are due at the time of application but some programs, especially medical schools, will ask for secondary statements a few months after you apply. In these instances be sure to complete them within two weeks, any longer is an indication that you aren't that interested in the institution.
Below is a second 5 Minute Fellowships video that can help you get started!
Before you start writing, take some time to reflect on your experiences and motivations as they relate to the programs to which you are applying. This will offer you a chance to organize your thoughts which will make the writing process much easier. Below are a list of questions to help you get started:
- What individuals, experiences or events have shaped your interest in this particular field?
- What has influenced your decision to apply to graduate school?
- How does this field align with your interests, strengths, and values?
- What distinguishes you from other applicants?
- What would you bring to this program/profession?
- What has prepared you for graduate study in this field? Consider your classes at Wellesley, research and work experience, including internships, summer jobs and volunteer work.
- Why are you interested in this particular institution or degree program?
- How is this program distinct from others?
- What do you hope to gain?
- What is motivating you to seek an advanced degree now?
- Where do you see yourself headed and how will this degree program help you get there?
For those applying to Medical School, if you need a committee letter for your application and are using the Medical Professions Advisory Committee you have already done a lot of heavy lifting through the 2017-2018 Applicant Information Form . Even if you aren't using MPAC the applicant information form is a great place to start.
Another great place to start is through talking out your ideas. You have a number of options both on and off campus, such as: Career Education advisors and mentors ( you can set up an appointment here ), major advisor, family, friends. If you are applying to a graduate program it is especially important to talk with a faculty member in the field. Remember to take good notes so you can refer to them later.
When you begin writing keep in mind that your essay is one of many in the application pool. This is not to say you should exaggerate your experiences to “stand out” but that you should focus on clear, concise writing. Also keep in mind that the readers are considering you not just as a potential student but a future colleague. Be sure to show them examples and experiences which demonstrate you are ready to begin their program.
It is important to remember that your personal statement will take time and energy to complete, so plan accordingly. Every application and statement should be seen as different from one another, even if they are all the same type of program. Each institution may teach you the same material but their delivery or focus will be slightly different.
In addition, remember:
- Be yourself: You aren’t good at being someone else
- Tragedy is not a requirement, reflection and depth are
- Research the institution or organization
- Proofread, proofread, proofread
- How to have your personal statement reviewed
The prompts below are from actual applications to a several types of programs. As you will notice many of them are VERY general in nature. This is why it is so important to do your research and reflect on your motivations. Although the prompts are similar in nature the resulting statements would be very different depending on the discipline and type of program, as well as your particular background and reasons for wanting to pursue this graduate degree.
- This statement should illustrate your academic background and experiences and explain why you would excel in the Department of Civil and Environmental Engineering (UMass Amherst - M.S. in Civil Engineering).
- Describe your academic and career objectives and how the Yale School of Forestry and Environmental Studies can help you achieve them. Include other considerations that explain why you seek admissions to the Yale School of Forestry and Environmental Studies and your interests in the environmental field (Yale - Master of Environmental Management).
- Please discuss your academic interests and goals. Include your current professional and research interests, as well as your long-range professional objectives. Please be as specific as possible about how your objectives can be met at Clark and do not exceed 800 words (Clark University - M.A. in International Development and Social Change).
- Write a 500- to 700-word statement that describes your work or research. Discuss how you came to focus on the medium, body of work, or academic area you wish to pursue at the graduate level. Also discuss future directions or goals for your work, and describe how the Master of Fine Arts in Studio (Printmedia) is particularly suited to your professional goals (School of the Art Institute of Chicago - MFA in Studio, Printmaking).
- Your statement should explain why you want to study economics at the graduate level. The statement is particularly important if there is something unusual about your background and preparation that you would like us to know about you (University of Texas at Austin - Ph.D in Economics).
- Your personal goal statement is an important part of the review process for our faculty members as they consider your application. They want to know about your background, work experience, plans for graduate study and professional career, qualifications that make you a strong candidate for the program, and any other relevant information (Indiana University Bloomington - M.S.Ed. in Secondary Education).
- Your autobiographical essay/personal statement is a narrative that outlines significant experiences in your life, including childhood experiences, study and work, your strengths and aspirations in the field of architecture, and why you want to come to the University of Oregon (University of Oregon - Master of Architecture).
- Personal history and diversity statement, in which you describe how your personal background informs your decision to pursue a graduate degree. You may refer to any educational, familial, cultural, economic or social experiences, challenges, community service, outreach activities, residency and citizenship, first-generation college status, or opportunities relevant to your academic journey; how your life experiences contribute to the social, intellectual or cultural diversity within a campus community and your chosen field; or how you might serve educationally underrepresented and underserved segments of society with your graduate education (U.C. Davis - M.A. in Linguistics).
- A Personal Statement specifying your past experiences, reasons for applying, and your areas of interest. It should explain your intellectual and personal goals, why you are interested in pursuing an interdisciplinary degree rather than a more traditional disciplinary one, and how this degree fits into your intellectual and personal future (Rutgers University - Ph.D in Women’s and Gender Studies).
- Your application requires a written statement to uploaded into your application and is a critical component of your application for admission. This is your opportunity to tell us what excites you about the field of library and information science, and what problems you want to help solve in this field. Please also tell us how your prior experiences have prepared you for this next step toward your career goals and how this program will help you achieve them (University of North Carolina Chapel Hill - Master of Science in Library Science).
- After watching the video, please describe what strengths and preferences as a learner you have that will facilitate your success in this innovative curriculum. What challenges in our curriculum do you anticipate and what strategies might you use to address these challenges? (MGH Institute of Health Professions PT - They recently redesigned their curriculum)
- Your personal goal statement should briefly describe how you view the future of the field, what your goals are to be part of that future, and what brought you to pursue an advanced education degree in your chosen field. You may include any other information that you feel might be useful. (Northeastern PT)
- Personal Statement: In 500 words or less, describe a meaningful educational experience that affected your professional goals and growth and explain how it impacted you. The educational experience does not need to be related to this degree. Focus on the educational experience and not why you think you would be a good professional in this field. (Simmons PT)
- Personal Statement (500 word minimum): State your reasons for seeking admission to this program at this institution. Include your professional goals, why you want to pursue a career in this field and how admission to this program will assist you in accomplishing those goals. (Regis College Nursing)
- “Use the space provided to explain why you want to go to this type of program.” (AMCAS)
- Address the following three questions(Though there is no set limit, most statements are 1–2 pages, single-spaced.): What are your reasons for pursuing this degree? Why do you wish to pursue your degree at this institution? How do you intend to leverage your degree in a career of this field? (Boston University MPH)
- Please submit a personal statement/statement of purpose of no more than 500 words for the department/degree of choice. Professional degree essays require a clear understanding of the _______ field and how you hope to work within the field. Be sure to proofread your personal statement carefully for spelling and grammar. In your statement, be sure to address the following: what interests you in the field of _____ what interests you in a specific degree program and department at this institution and what interests you in a particular certificate (if applicable). Please also describe how you hope to use your ________ training to help you achieve your career goals. (Columbia PhD in Public Health - Epidemiology)
- Because each Home Program requires significant original research activities in fulfillment of the requirements for the degree, we are interested in obtaining as much information as possible about your previous research experiences. Those who already have such experience are in a better position to know whether they are truly interested in performing ______ research as part of a graduate program. Please include specific information about your research experience in your Statement of Purpose. You may also use the Statement to amplify your comments about your choice of Home Program(s), and how your past experiences and current interests are related to your choice. Personal Statements should not exceed two pages in length (single spaced). Make sure to set your computer to Western European or other English-language setting. We cannot guarantee the ability to access your statement if it is submitted in other fonts. (Stanford Biosciences PhD)
- Your statement of purpose should describe succinctly your reasons for applying to the Department of ____ at ___ University. It would be helpful to include what you have done to prepare for this degree program. Please describe your research interests, past research experience, future career plans and other details of your background and interests that will allow us to evaluate your ability to thrive in our program. If you have interests that align with a specific faculty member, you may state this in your application. Your statement of purpose should not exceed two pages in length (single spaced). (Stanford Bioengineering PhD)
- Statement of purpose (Up to one page or 1,000 words): Rather than a research proposal, you should provide a statement of purpose. Your statement should be written in English and explain your motivation for applying for the course at this institution and your relevant experience and education. Please provide an indication of the area of your proposed research and supervisor(s) in your statement. This will be assessed for the coherence of the statement; evidence of motivation for and understanding of the proposed area of study; the ability to present a reasoned case in English; and commitment to the subject. (Oxford Inorganic Chemistry - DPhil)
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Social Security Matters
What you can do to protect your personal information.
August 21, 2024 • By Dawn Bystry, Associate Commissioner, Office of Strategic and Digital Communications
Last Updated: August 21, 2024
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With various reports of data breaches involving Social Security numbers in the media, we’d like to remind you about the importance of protecting your personal information. Someone illegally using your Social Security number (SSN) and possibly assuming your identity can cause many problems.
What to do if you suspect your Social Security number has been stolen
Identity thieves can use your SSN and other personal information to apply for loans and credit cards and open cellphone and utility accounts in your name. If you believe your information has been stolen and you may be a victim of identity theft, you can:
- Visit IdentityTheft.gov to make a report and get a recovery plan. IdentityTheft.gov is a one-stop resource managed by the Federal Trade Commission, the nation’s consumer protection agency. Or you can call 1-877-IDTHEFT (1-877-438-4338).
- File a police report and keep a copy for your records in case problems arise in the future.
- File an online report with the Internet Crime Complaint Center (IC3) at ic3.gov . Its mission is to receive, develop, and refer cybercrime complaints to law enforcement and regulatory agencies.
- Equifax at 1-800-525-6285.
- Experian at 1-888-397-3742.
- TransUnion at 1-800-680-7289.
- Regularly check your credit report for anything unusual. Free credit reports are available online at AnnualCreditReport.com .
- Contact the IRS to prevent someone else from using your Social Security number to file a tax return to receive your refund. Visit Identity Theft Central or call 1-800-908-4490.
To learn more, read our blog , Protect Yourself from Identity Thieves , and our Identity Theft and Your Social Security Number publication.
What else can you do to protect yourself
Create or sign in to your personal my Social Security account to check for any suspicious activity. If you have not yet applied for benefits:
- You should not find any benefit payment amounts, and you should be able to access your Social Security Statement and view future benefit estimates.
- Review your Statement to verify the accuracy of the earnings posted to your record to make sure no one else is using your Social Security number to work.
If you receive benefits, you can add blocks to your personal my Social Security account:
- The eServices block prevents anyone, including you, from viewing or changing your personal information online.
- The Direct Deposit Fraud Prevention block prevents anyone, including you, from enrolling in direct deposit or changing your address or direct deposit information through my Social Security or a financial institution (via auto-enrollment).
You’ll need to contact us to make changes or remove the blocks.
Other ways to safeguard your information
- Don’t carry your Social Security card with you. Keep it at home in a safe place. Be careful about who you give your number to.
- Change your passwords regularly and use a unique password for each account to prevent hackers from accessing multiple accounts if one password is stolen.
- Add an extra layer of security to your online accounts by using multi-factor authentication, which is a sign-in process that requires a password plus additional information.
- Be wary of scammers pretending to be Social Security employees. If you get a suspicious call, text, or email about a problem with your Social Security number or account, ignore it, hang up, and don’t respond! To report the scam and to learn more, visit Protect Yourself From Scams .
You’ll find more tips at our Fraud Prevention and Reporting page.
Please share this important information with your friends and family and post it on social media.
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September 1, 2024 2:36AM
Well nowadays to protect personal information from internet is difficult because simple people don’t know phishing techniques. Thanks great article it will really help people regards william
August 30, 2024 11:33PM
I am an 86 years old US Citizen. I received a letter from SSA NEW UTRECHT DISTRICT OFFICE (New York) about the phone interview. The letter shows my old phone number. I called many years ago and asked to update my phone number. For some reason the phone is not updated. I am unable to visit office because of my age. I am unable to create an account online. Could you please email me fax number and/or email, where I can email/fax my current phone number. To prove my identity, I will email the scan of all supporting documents – my SSN, Passport, bills, phone bill. Please help.
August 25, 2024 8:25PM
From this Aug 21, 2024 article by Dawn Bystry, under What else can you do to protect yourself She states: If you receive benefits, you can add blocks to your personal my Social Security account: The eServices block prevents anyone, including you, from viewing or changing your personal information online. The Direct Deposit Fraud Prevention block prevents anyone, including you, from enrolling in direct deposit or changing your address or direct deposit information through my Social Security or a financial institution (via auto-enrollment).
Which sounds good, but no amount of searching reveals how I can place these blocks on my account!
It does state:
So presumably I’ll need to call the SSA 800 number or visit the local SSA office?
August 27, 2024 9:26PM
Hartsville South Carolina and Lamar South Carolina and Florence South Carolina and Darlington South Carolina and United States and Child Tax Credit Monthly check CTC and 2,000 and 3,000 age15 and age13 and 4th stimulus check and 1,700.00 and SSA and SSDI and SSI and 1,400.00 and P-EBT K-12 and 391.00 and 🇺🇸 🙄
August 24, 2024 2:23PM
Like so many others, your process is useless. My PI has been exposed and sold to Dark Web 4 times in the last 2 years. You allow sale of our data as if we were slaves to be bartered?
August 24, 2024 7:41AM
The social security office or US Social Security Administration at location 1871 Rockaway Pkwy, Brooklyn, NY 11236 and phone number 1- 800 772-1213 or 1-866-667-7342 want me to do illegal prostitution with them for my ssi money is why they gave me the worker the Asian worker to ask about my payee money that I need another instead of giving it to me the sole owner. I don’t need a representative
August 25, 2024 1:19AM
this is one of my links that can help that is connect with us or external websites
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August 27, 2024 9:27PM
South carolina and United States and SSA and SSDI and SSI and 1,400.00 and 4th stimulus check and 1,700.00
August 23, 2024 12:12PM
Why is the onus on ‘We the People’ to fix government mishaps? Private companies should NEVER have been allowed to store ANY critical private data in the first place! This is a complete failure. What are YOU doing to course correct? /We/ didn’t /get/ our data stolen, /YOU/ failed to provide /protection/ from thieving. What is being done about it?
August 22, 2024 11:14AM
Good Morning, My question is Is there a way I can add a pin or password to my number or maybe put a freeze on my SS number????
August 22, 2024 5:40PM
I like this question.
August 26, 2024 6:43AM
You can lock and unlock your social security number by creating an account at https://myeverify.uscis.gov/
Make sure the first thing you do is check to make sure that website actually has https on it as well as the little lock at the top and the word .gov to show it is an actual government website.
Once you create the account you can go there to proceed to lock your social security number. This will prevent anyone, including you to get a job with any employer that uses electronic background verification and will also prevent anyone from applying for benefits in your name. Keep in mind that if you go to get another job or apply for benefits you will need to temporarily unlock your social security number to apply.
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Dos and don'ts of resume personal statements
A good personal statement can make your resume catch a recruiter's eye. We'll show you how to write a solid personal statement highlighting your unique skills, experiences, and professional goals. Whatever career stage you're in, we've got you covered. Read on to find information on the topic, resume personal statement examples, and helpful tips to help you stand out in the job market.
- What is a personal statement?
- Key elements to include in a personal statement
- Personal statement examples
- Tips on writing a personal statement for your resume
- Formatting and structuring your statement
- Common mistakes when writing a personal statement
- Bottom line
What is a personal statement?
Think of a personal statement as a quick snapshot of yourself on your resume. It's a brief section that tells employers what kind of employee you are. Sometimes, it's also called resume objectives or CV personal statement.
The personal statement shows your goals and what makes you unique. It can be used to show how your skills, experiences, and job goals make you stand out from other applicants. This can significantly affect how the employer sees you as a potential employee.
It's your chance to add personality, passion, and purpose to your resume. You can make an impression that will make you shine during your job search.
Key elements to include in a personal statement
To make a great resume summary, remember these important points that help a hiring manager understand who you are professionally:
- Who you are: Start by briefly saying who you are. Give a short but clear summary of your work background.
- Summary of your experiences : Give a brief outline of your career. Focus on crucial turning points, accomplishments, and related experiences. This part overviews your career path and shows how broad or deep your knowledge is.
- Your value as an employee: Explain what makes you special. Talk about the skills, qualities, and experiences that make you different from others applying for the job. Show how your experience matches the company's needs and how you can help them succeed.
- Your career objectives : At the end of your resume objective statement, list your career goals and ambitions. Make your short and long-term career goals clear. This shows that you're committed to professional growth and development.
Personal statement examples
A good personal statement can be an important part of shaping your career, whether you’re a recent graduate or an experienced professional. Here are some examples of personal statements from different career stages. They show off relevant skills, experiences, and goals of job seekers.
Personal statement examples for students looking for internships
"I am a driven undergraduate student majoring in marketing, seeking internship opportunities to apply classroom knowledge in real-world settings. I have a proven ability to develop client relationships and execute marketing strategies. I am ready to share new thoughts and learn from people with more experience."
"Dedicated undergraduate student studying mechanical engineering, looking for an internship opportunity to apply theoretical knowledge to practical projects. Skilled with CAD tools and has experience making prototypes. Possesses strong critical thinking skills and takes the necessary steps to solve problems. Excellent collaborator who is always looking to learn and improve."
Personal statement example for fresh graduates
"I am a recent finance bachelor's degree holder with a solid grasp of financial principles and robust analytic abilities. I have operated effectively in dynamic settings and provided precise financial analysis. I am seeking an entry-level role in financial analysis to utilise my academic knowledge and contribute to organisational success."
"Highly motivated human resource management graduate who is deeply committed to cultivating positive work environments. Proficient in employee relations, performance management, and recruitment. Seeking an HR position to implement academic knowledge and acquire practical experience."
Personal statement examples for working professionals
"I am an experienced sales manager with more than five years of experience in B2B sales. I am currently looking to resume my professional career. I have a proven history of exceeding sales goals, building strong relationships with clients, and establishing vital client leads. I am looking for a challenging sales manager position where I can use my leadership skills to coach a team of top performers and make the company more profitable."
"I am an accomplished project manager with a background in information technology. I am skilled at coordinating the efforts of diverse teams to complete challenging assignments on schedule and within budget. I have consistently reduced risk and guaranteed project success. I am seeking new opportunities to apply my project management expertise in a dynamic environment."
Personal statement example for workers making mid-career transitions
"Experienced marketer ready to move into digital advertising. Skilled in both digital and conventional marketing tactics, with a particular focus on expanding brands' reach and interaction via online media. Seeks a position to use marketing talents to create modern digital advertising strategies."
"I am a project manager with extensive experience, with a career goal to work in sustainable development. I am passionate about positively affecting society and comfortable in a fast-paced environment. I have expertise at working with stakeholders and planning strategically."
Tips on writing a personal statement for your resume
Before you start writing your statement, think about the following tips.
Selecting the most impactful experiences to share
Carefully choose which experiences to highlight in your CV personal statement. Consider the following aspects to guarantee that you demonstrate the most effective ones:
- Relevance to job scope: Select experiences and relevant qualifications that directly relate to the needs of your desired role.
- Significance of results: Highlight experiences in which you achieved substantial results. Focus on your efforts and accomplishments.
- Business impact: Show how your work has increased the company's profits. Give numbers to support your results and explain how your work has helped the group succeed or grow.
Demonstrating problem-solving and leadership through past scenarios
In your resume personal statement, use examples from your past to show how you've solved problems and led others .
Try to give an example of your problem and how you solved it. Highlight situations when you were proactive, made tough choices, and helped others succeed.
Demonstrating that you can deal with problems and lead confidently shows you're ready for new tasks in your next job.
Keeping your personal statement concise
Write a short, clear, objective statement to help you hold the reader's attention. Here are some suggestions to help you keep your resume personal statement short:
- Editing: Carefully read over your resume and personal statement. Remove unnecessary details or repeated information, and ensure you only include the most useful and important facts.
- Clarity: Write clearly to make sure your message is easy to understand. Avoid using jargon or academic terms that the reader might not know.
- Length: Personal statements should be short but full of helpful information. There is no rigid word limit but keep your statement to a few brief lines that get to the point of who you are as a professional and what you want to achieve.
Formatting and structuring your statement
Here are some guidelines for making your objective statement more straightforward and organised.
Formatting tips for maximum readability
The layout of your resume personal statement affects how hiring managers read and interact with your content. To make sure your writing is easy to comprehend, consider the following:
- For a professional appearance, pick a classy font that's simple to read, such as Times New Roman, Arial, or Calibri.
- Keep the font size the same throughout the document. The best range is between 10pt and 12pt.
- When choosing the point of view, think about the tone and setting of your resume personal statement.
- First-person POV allows you to connect with the reader more directly, and third-person POV can present an air of professionalism and objectivity.
Pros and cons of each POV style
Both the first-person and the third-person POVs have pros and cons. A first-person POV makes it feel like the text is directed at the reader, but it can sometimes be too casual. On the other hand, a third-person POV seems objective and professional. This is common in formal settings but can feel impersonal or distant.
The POV you choose affects the way your personal statement reads. First-person POV creates a more personal and conversational tone. The third-person perspective conveys a feeling of formality and objectivity, setting a tone appropriate for formal papers.
Alignment with your overall resume style
Pick a POV for your personal statement that complements your resume's general tone and style. The document should flow from one section to the next. To make a good impression on recruiters, change the POV to fit the role, the company culture, and the business. If you’re applying for a creative role, you can make your resume stand out by matching the creative writing style of your prospective employer.
Resume personal statement in first-person POV
“With a strong background in content marketing, I excel in writing, editing, content planning, and SEO. In my previous roles, I was committed to ensuring my team met deadlines and KPIs. I'm eager to leverage my skills and enthusiasm as Content Manager for the Singapore Creative Ad Agency.”
Resume personal statement in third-person POV
“Has a strong background in content marketing. Excels in writing, editing, content planning, and SEO. In previous roles, demonstrated a commitment to ensuring the team met deadlines and KPIs. Eager to leverage skills and enthusiasm as Content Manager for the Singapore Creative Ad Agency.”
Common mistakes when writing a personal statement
Avoid common clichés and overused phrases.
Don't include phrases such as "hardworking," "team player," and "results-oriented." They don't say much about you and won't help you stand out from other applicants.
What to leave out of your personal statements
Remove any old or useless information that doesn't fit with your story or add value to your application. For example, if your achievements as a high school student aren’t relevant to your application, don’t include them. Read the job description carefully before adding any information.
Bad personal statement examples
"Motivated individual seeking challenging opportunities to utilise analytical skills and grow within a dynamic organisation."
"Passionate team player with excellent communication skills and a strong work ethic."
"Detail-oriented professional with a proven track record of success in various roles."
These examples are too short and vague. They don’t say anything about you as a person or employee. Make sure your personal statements showcase your unique traits and career path. Show your positive impact in your previous roles, and highlight what benefit your prospective employer can get from hiring you.
Bottom line
Personal statements can make or break a job application. Using the ideas, examples, and advice in this guide, you can write the best statement that catches the hiring managers interest and connects with them on a deeper level. Remember that your personal statement is more than just a summary of your work history. It's your chance to show potential employers what you can do and how passionate you are about the job.
- What should I write in my statement for a resume? Your statement should briefly summarise your professional attributes. It should cover relevant skills, experiences, and career goals that match the role you're pursuing.
- Can you provide summary statements and examples for a job application? Yes! Here's an example: "As a seasoned marketing professional with a passion for innovation, I'm excited to leverage my expertise in digital marketing to enhance and energise your dynamic team at XYZ Company. Committed to driving tangible outcomes, I aim to contribute my skills in crafting impactful campaigns and utilising analytics to fuel your organisation's success."
- How long should a personal statement be on a resume? A few sentences should be enough for a short but powerful statement. They should focus on the most relevant information that fits the job description.
- What are some dos and don'ts for writing a resume personal statement? Dos: Personalise your statement for the position and company. Highlight your job-related abilities, experiences, and accomplishments. Don'ts: Avoid using clichés or generic phrases. Don't make it too long.
- How can I make my statement stand out to employers? Make your personal statements special to each role you apply for. Think about your personal profile and the job description. Highlight your unique skills, accomplishments, and goals that match the role's needs. This will help you connect strongly with managers.
- Are there any online tools to help me craft a personal statement? Yes, tools like Perfect Essay Writer, Paper Help, and BBQ Papers can help you improve and modify your personal statements by giving you language tips and reading-level feedback.
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My personal nursing mission statement is changing and developing as my career advances, however, one core piece will remain constant. I will strive to provide the best, safest, most ethical and compassionate nursing care that I can for all patients and family members with whom I come in contact. I began my post-high school academic career as an accounting major. I enjoyed the challenge of manipulating a report until I had balanced. I thought I had found my calling. As my first semester was nearing an end, I found myself contemplating the thought of sitting behind a desk all day. I wondered if I would find fulfillment in this work as a career? The more I pondered this thought, the more I realized that this was not the right career path for me. I saw images of the medical assistant program in the catalog at the school where I was attending. I could not shake the thought of the medical field for a profession. I attained my medical assistant degree and worked in the field for 10 years. The longer I worked, the more I realized that there was more that I wanted to do, but my current degree restricted me from going further. I researched nursing school programs and selected one with a night/weekend program that would allow me to continue working full-time during my studies. I have a family that I needed to continue to provide for and this seemed to be the best fit. My nursing school decision was fortified when I was selected for an award by the nursing faculty from all four semesters for excellence in the clinical setting. After graduation, I began my nursing career working as a case manager for orthopedic worker’s compensation patients. During this time I gained critical knowledge of the importance of clear documentation, the ever-changing requirements of insurance companies and an extra measure of compassion for…
Optometry College Application Essay Sample
The career of an Optometrist is in high demand, so I am assured that I will have the chance to obtain a position and make a difference. Optometry, correspondingly, has a malleable work agenda. Looking ahead, I desire to raise a family in South Dakota, and I would like to spend much of my time with them. Lastly, Optometry is a satisfying career and it comprises personal fulfillment. As an Optometrist aids an individual with their eyesight, he or she also brings the individual more opportunities, for example, in sports or in learning. One does not have to strain their eyes to see from the back of the room, or struggle to recognize the proper distance and angle of shooting a basketball into a hoop, with the help of an…
Nyu Emba Essay
3. The NYU Stern Executive MBA program’s curriculum is designed with a strong global focus. Stern is committed to helping students develop not only a deeper set of professional skills, but also a broader perspective of the role of business in the world. (500-750 words, double-spaced)…
Sonography Career
The first time I started college I had a different career path. It was not after my pregnancies that I decided to make the change to sonography. I think sonography is a career that really fits my expectations, and to make sure I am in the right path I will research this career in depth.…
Application Essay: My Journey To Medical School
In addition, my employment experience has provided me with great respect for social and ethical views that differ from my own. This position has given me the opportunity to decide if a career in medicine is truly where I would like to be. Working at the hospital has been a truly challenging experience through dealing with the magnitude of death, illness, and recovery. This experience has made me realize that a career in medicine is where I need to be. I have experienced a multitude of emotions and in the end I have realized that the reward of knowing that a life was saved or that through the death of a patient, we have made groundbreaking discoveries in medicine is far greater than the emotional tensity associated with the experience.…
Physical Therapy Assistant Personal Statement
In my life, I have been a patient too many times to say I am well familiar with different roles in health care. When I was fourteen I was diagnosed with a type of cancer called Hodgkin’s Lymphoma and after six months of treatment I decided I wanted to help others like the many clinicians that helped me. After I graduated high school I got a job at an outpatient physical therapy clinic and there my true passion began. This inspired me to apply and eventually get accepted into the Physical Therapist Assistant program at Gateway Community College. The Physical Therapist Assistant program at Gateway will help me reach my goal of becoming a Physical Therapist Assistant by developing my character professionally, giving me the knowledge to help patients, and pass my board to receive my license as a Physical Therapist Assistant.…
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to me would have to be the clinical duties of this profession. I really enjoy one on one time with people,…
Pediatric Nurse Application Essay
When I started this program I was deciding between being a pediatrician or a pediatric nurse, but now that I have been through the program and had a chance to explore many different careers I have shifted between many different pathways in the medical field. Especially when I went to the medical career club meetings, I would always question what I thought I wanted and would end up going back to my main reason for wanting to be a pediatrician or a pediatric nurse, I love working with kids. As I transitioned from introduction to health to medical terminology, I found one career that I never knew existed, a neonatal nurse. As soon as i realized that you can work, let alone get payed to work with babies, there would be no questioning what I wanted…
Essay On Optometry
Optometrists are healthcare professionals that provide particular attention to the eyes and vision. Optometrists are educated to improve the vision of Optometric patients, and in some cases, they are trained to spot, diagnose, and cleanse an array of eye illnesses, as well as detect different diseases. They usually proceed by distributing a variety of corrective lenses. Furthermore optometrists assist their patients on how to use their prescriptions and they tackle different areas in this particular medical field. It is a very beneficial career course. To become an Optometrist is a highly rigorous process that takes many years to actually accomplish. Yet it is probably one of my best options that will lead me to success. Though they are not technically doctors, they do receive a title that is…
Essay On Optometrist
13. In optometry there is a lot of math and science. “We don’t have to face all of the blood and gore that medical doctors deal with, but we have to stomach a lot of math and science” said an Indian optometrist named Tracy Schroeder.…
Reflective Essay: My Experiences In The Medical Field
When I was four years old I was asked, "Katie, what do you want to do when you grow up?” To my family's surprise my response was "Work on hearts or brains". This aspiration has never wavered, and has only become more a part of who I am today through first hand experiences and opportunities I have had in the medical field. I have been fortunate enough to see surgeries first hand, work next to medical professionals, and get an idea of what different occupations bring to the table in the field of medicine.…
Essay On Optometrist Job
Optometrists have many places to work at. They can either work at a hospital, office, or run their own business. If one would work in an office, they would need to know how to work well with others and know how to run an office. An optometrist can also work for someone else, “They may be a private practitioner, operate a franchise optical store, or be an employee of another Optometrist. Private practitioners or franchise optical store operators may also be responsible for running their office...or work for HMOs or hospitals,” (Field). This shows that there are many places open for an optometrist to work at. Optometrists have a variety of places to work with a well salary that can support one.…
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According to Dr. Munroe, the goal of the personal statement is to show the admissions team mainly three things; 1) your personality, 2) your commitment to optometry, and 3) your passion and motivation that will help guide you through optometry school—the "fire in your belly.". Your GPA and OAT scores will speak for themselves, but the ...
Optometry Personal Statement. 4 Oct,2022 Alan Whitworth. Use this Optometry personal statement example as an inspiration to write your own for the UK university application, if you are applying to study Optometry course. Finding a profession that both fulfils one's intellectual interests and provides a sense of purpose is the key to a ...
Personal statement help! I'm in the process of writing my personal statement and I am having a hard time starting! This is how I found optometry: I had always wanted to be in the healthcare field but I was unsure what I wanted to do! I shadowed a pharmacist, dentist, and physical therapist in which none of these peaked my interest.
10. Reaction score. 3. Jun 24, 2015. #8. Here is the prompt for the optometry school personal statement: "Please describe what inspires your decision for becoming an optometrist, including your preparation for training in this profession, your aptitude and motivation, the basis for your interest in optometry, and your future career goals.".
Imo a personal statement should display your personality and your why rather than listing all ur accomplishments (like u said it's already in ur app). I talked about my first intro to optometry, why and how I got into optometry, experiences w optometrists I've shadowed, specific and unique patient interactions, and connections between the ...
Have as many people look over it and give you constructive criticism as you can. 3 Don't screw it up. This admin said the person reading your statement has already read hundreds, you are not going to say anything they haven't heard. That witty line is waaaay more likely to fall flat than it is to grab their attention.
Optometry Personal Statement. Mathematics, chemistry and economics 'A' levels have provided me with a varied knowledge and a range of skills. Mathematics has helped me excel in my ability to analyse a problem and think of a systematic way of solving it. I have a personality trait of always investigating the reasoning behind a concept and this ...
The Free Guide to Writing the Personal Statement. Kick things off with the two greatest brainstorming exercises ever, learn about options for structuring a personal statement + example outlines, check out some amazing example personal statements, and get on your way to writing your own killer personal statement for university applications.
An eager interest in the workings and anatomy of the eye has stemmed my interest towards a career in optometry. My fondness for science came from reading the book 'The Man Who Mistook His Wife for His Hat', which recounts the case histories of patients lost in the bizarre, apparently inescapable world of neurological disorders, this drove my passion past the scope of the curriculum, engaging ...
Optometry Personal Statement Online for All. According to Dr. Munroe, the aim of the optometry personal statement is to indicate three things to the admissions team: 1) personality, 2) dedication to optometry, and 3) passion and motivation that will guide you through optometry school - the "fire in your belly.".
The personal statement for Optometry plays a significant role in the application process for many universities. They provide the admissions team with information on your academia, work experience, and personality, to help them determine whether you're a good fit for their program.
Intro: what got me into optometry/healthcare fields. Body paragraphs: why I chose to major in Biology, my leadership experiences in my undergrad, my struggles and how I overcome it. conclusion: future goals as an optometrist. 4.6K subscribers in the PreOptometry community. For Pre-Optometry students to discuss and share information on admissions.
Those who struggling for an Optometry Personal Statement structure here is are some ideas: 1. 3/4 sentences about REASON to study optometry 2. WIDER READING (its not necessary but you could read journals like Optometry Today), WORK EXPERIENCE (this does not necessarily have to be carried out in a practice, it could be online short courses like ...
Optometry personal statement + work experience; Watch. 1 year ago. Optometry personal statement + work experience. jojo257_ 11. ... Yep, getting any wex rn is super difficult (lots of medics I kno still haven't got any), so good job! It 100% is still relevant, in a ps remember to reflect on what you saw and those transferable skills! 1 Report ...
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A personal statement is a narrative essay that connects your background, experiences, and goals to the mission, requirements, and desired outcomes of the specific opportunity you are seeking. It is a critical component in the selection process, whether the essay is for a competitive internship, a graduate fellowship, or admittance to a graduate school program.
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For Pre-Optometry students to discuss and share information on admissions ... Members Online • Emergency_Shake2987 . Can someone please help me with my personal statement? This is my first attempt of applying to optometry schools and I could really use some help. Thank you! Pm me if interested. ... Manifesting good scores and an easy test for ...
A good personal statement can make your resume catch a recruiter's eye. We'll show you how to write a solid personal statement highlighting your unique skills, experiences, and professional goals. Whatever career stage you're in, we've got you covered. Read on to find information on the topic, resume personal statement examples, and helpful ...
Personal statement for optometry. A. Stressedoutxxx. 12. I'm currently in the process of writing my PS to study optometry but I'm struggling a bit. I'm not sure how to structure it, what to talk about and in which order and it doesn't help that there are no optometry PS examples online. I'm particularly struggling with writing an ...
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I am starting my personal statement because I want to submit my application soon, and I was wondering if this seems too off topic for the essay. ... Basically my main thesis for the reason I want to do optometry/my goals in the field is something to do with helping kids and to be specific foster kids, because I am my parents only biological ...
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Took me roughly 1 month from start to finish. I wrote mine in a couple days but asked my friends and school to proofread it. The process took about 3 weeks. I really loved the final versus my first draft before proofreading. Don't write about how you got your first pair of glasses, or make it dramatic.